The Book Man, Chapter 11 (Revised)

by BluesClues

Published March 2, 2014

E - Everyone

In The Book Man

11 OVER THE WALL

That night he crept out of the Book House, armed with a flashlight and The Hobbit. If anyone saw him loitering outside the gate at such an hour, he could say he was reading beneath the starlight. And this book, with its talk of quests and mountains and elves, had often enflamed him with the desire to go on an adventure of his own and do great things—a desire that died away again at the searing heat of summer or the biting cold of winter, or whenever he happened upon anything difficult and unpleasant.

This, however, was different. Conrad needed him; at least, he told himself so. It was much more a question of his needing to be sure the balloon-artist was, in fact, alright, and that the adventure of the night before had truly happened.

He slunk across the street to the park gate, all too conscious of his height. There were no streetlamps here, but the stars shone brightly that enough anyone who chanced to look out their window now would see the spindly figure moving in the night.

The stone walls of Celadon Park loomed before him, shapeless with ivy and honeysuckle. The heavy padlock glinted in the starlight. How to get inside? As lanky as he was, Christian could not fit through the bars of the gate. He looked up at the heights of the wall and imagined finding footholds in the dark, when frightening black shapes might be looming overhead. His sense of adventure wavered. He made his way back across the street and into the Book House.

No sooner had he reached the safety of his bedroom than he remembered the book in his hand. He sat on the edge of the bed and flipped through it, considering Bilbo Baggins and how he had come through all his adventures to wealth and happiness. Celadon Park was less fearsome than dragons and great battles, though he did not look forward to walking through the woods alone. Christian stood up and crossed the street again—but not five minutes later he was back in the Book House.

Three times he crossed back and forth between the park and his home, but finally he stood beneath the park wall, glaring up at it with resolve. He slipped the book into his pocket, clutched the flashlight in his hand, and began climbing.

The wall was not terribly high, perhaps ten feet, but the tangles of leaves and flowers draping it felt flimsy beneath Christian’s weight. He slipped the flashlight into his other pocket so he could use both hands for climbing, but he had never been good at things like climbing to begin with. And when he had pulled himself to the top of the wall, clinging to vines of honeysuckle, he faced the immense difficulty of getting over it.

He placed his feet on the highest vine he dared, still some two or three feet below the top, and crouched there in an absurd fetal position with his arm straining as he grasped the wall. Slowly, he stood up and peered over it into the park.

Below there was only darkness. Some sort of tree was before him, its leaves rustling in the nighttime breeze, and it obscured all beneath it. Christian swayed on his vine and gripped the top of the wall so tightly his knuckles turned white.

With difficulty, he pulled himself up onto the top of the wall, straddling it as if he were riding a horse. He squinted down at the park, but he saw only the faint greyness of the ground below, and it looked an awfully long way down. He swung his other leg over to the inner wall and began his descent, but now even less than before was he able to find hand and footholds.

He closed his eyes and jumped.

There was a horrible stomach-turning fall, but it lasted only a fraction of a second. Then he had landed—somewhat painfully, on his side and the arm he’d thrown out to catch himself—but there he was, nonetheless. He stood up, took the flashlight back out of his trouser pocket, and clicked it on.

Rather, he tried to click it on, but nothing happened. He stared at the dark flashlight. He held it to his ear and shook it but did not hear the rattling of a dead bulb; he opened the battery compartment to find it empty.

“Of course, it would be empty,” he said to himself. The flashlight went back in his trouser pocket as he cursed himself for his idiocy. (Only a fool would go on an adventure without first making sure his flashlight had batteries, he thought.) Then he slipped his hand into his other pocket, clutched the book close to his chest for comfort, and moved on.

The walk through the wood was shorter than Christian remembered, perhaps because he didn’t have a limping friend hanging onto his arm; but it was dark and lonely, full of the glowing eyes of animals scurrying just out of sight. Even from here, however, he could hear the merriment of the Fair: the tinkling music and animal noises, the shouts and laughter and the rush of flame. The sound grew louder as he neared the clearing, and it heartened him. Not a dream, then.

He caught sight of the two feuding ringmasters in the midst of the crowd as soon as the Fair appeared. Christian edged around the clearing to avoid them but could not help almost stepping on more of the squat little men like the one he’d seen the night before. They hopped all around the edges of the carnival.

Imelda was standing barefoot outside her wagon, stirring a green concoction in a round-bellied pot over the fire. She looked up as Christian approached and said, “For his leg. It’ll help keep down the swelling.”

“Oh, is it swelling?” Christian asked, trying to sound politely interested instead of repulsed.

She grinned. “Don’t worry. It’s all bandaged up. You can go in and see him, if you like.”

Christian traipsed into the wagon to see Conrad lying in the little bunk against the back wall, covered in a patchwork quilt and looking a little better than before. At least his breathing came easier, though his complexion was still greyish instead of its usual rich brown. At present, he was asleep.

Christian edged along the wall, trying not to bump up against one of the many shelves filled with glass vials. He was glad to be visiting Conrad in this bright (if tiny) space rather than a hospital after all. He had never liked hospitals, the sterile whiteness of them, the smell of sickness, the anxious family members; he had liked them even less since his mother’s death some twenty years ago.

Even so, the sight of the balloon-artist lying so still frightened him. A wave of panic swept over him. He shook Conrad’s shoulders, saying over and over again “Conrad—Conrad” until his friend awakened with a yawn and a groan.

“What are you on about, lad?”

Christian withdrew his hand, feeling silly as his panic subsided.

“Nothing,” he said. He maneuvered himself into an uncomfortable sit on the floor with the bedframe pressing into his right side and his long legs sticking up in front of him like the legs of a spider. “How are you feeling?”

“Never better,” Conrad said, but his arms trembled as he tried to push himself into a sit. Through the window above the bed, they heard Imelda’s voice: “Don’t even think about trying to sit up, Conrad Smithson!”

Conrad lowered himself back onto the bunk, greyer than before for his effort.

“She always knows. I’ve no idea how, but she always knows. Canny lass.” The accountant’s lips puckered; Conrad was clearly in more pain than he let on, but the balloon-artist forestalled any comment of concern by nodding at Christian’s book. “Whatever are you reading now?”

“The Hobbit,” said Christian.

The balloon-artist chuckled. “Something Tookish woke up inside you, did it? By the bye, however did you get in? It occurred to me this morning that I still have the key.”

“Yes,” said Christian. “I climbed.”

Conrad let out a shout of laughter that turned to another groan as his body contorted with pain.

“God, that hurts,” he said. “You climbed, eh? Bet that was a sight. Here. Better give you this.”

The accountant blushed as Conrad handed him the bronze key from the night before. The balloon-artist didn’t notice; his brow furrowed as Christian pocketed the key. After a moment he asked, “Liza been round?”

Christian shook his head. “She called. She wanted to know if I’d seen you.”

“What’d you tell her?”

“Nothing.” The words tumbled from his lips in such a rush he almost tripped over them. “How do you tell someone her husband’s been attacked by a hellhound? And certainly there’s no way to tell her that he’s missing a chunk out of his leg without making her worry. I mean it’s—it’s fantastic. It’s unbelievable.”

“Well,” Conrad said, rubbing his leg, “not quite unbelievable.”

Christian’s face burned. “Sorry.”

The balloon-artist shrugged. Christian flipped through the pages of his book at random as they sat in silence. He was so full of questions he hardly knew which to ask first. He glanced surreptitiously at Conrad, whose color was a little improved from earlier. Time for questions later, he thought, when his friend was back on his feet.

“You’re not sure about it, of course,” the balloon-artist said, and Christian realized with a jolt his friend had been watching him as well. “I realize it’s sudden, but—you must understand, I wouldn’t have brought you into this if I didn’t need help. And I can’t thank you enough for getting me here last night, Christian. You saved my life, you know.”

The back of Christian’s neck burned with embarrassment.

“I didn’t, really,” he mumbled. The balloon-artist grinned at his discomfort but made no further effort to thank him. “Conrad, what is all this? The park, and the Rovers, and the—the hellhound, I mean, and—”

“And the Fair,” Conrad said, nodding. “This, lad, all this is what I grew up with.”

“I don’t understand,” Christian said, so the balloon-artist explained.

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Valkyria
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Valkyria wrote a review Review · Sep 23, 2020

Hello BluesCLues,

Courtesy of RevMo, I am back for another review!

There isn't a lot I can say that the other reviewers haven't said, but I really enjoyed this chapter. The pacing is great, and Christain is getting some character development. In the beginning, he was happy living by himself, staying inside that house for much of his time. He didn't like talking to people.

But he climbed up the wall! I'm so proud of him!

The Hobbit is one of my favorite books, so the first paragraph really spoke to me.

Then he had landed—somewhat painfully, on his side and the arm he’d thrown out to catch himself—but there he was, nonetheless.


This feels a little awkard to read, so if you changed the words around:

Then he landed on his side and the arm he'd thrown out to catch himself somewhat painfully, but there he was, nonetheless.


I hope the suggestion helped. Christain is growing into his own person. This was a great chapter, as always.

Thanks so much!

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TimmyJake
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TimmyJake wrote a review Review · Jul 10, 2014

Timmy here!

Really, there isn't much for me to say here. Nothing really that I can add to what the other reviewers have said, and what you have written here for me to read. The flow was wonderful, and I spied nothing that pulled me out of the story. No problems with plot as far as I could see, and both the character and the plot are both fleshing out quite nicely now. Both of them are really getting huge! Metaphorically speaking, that is. Christian, as you previously mentioned, is rather slim.

I really liked his journey in this chapter. No, not the journey through the park, or even getting to the park. I mean his journey as a character. In the beginning of the chapter, he was, quite honestly, very cowardly. He walked up to the fence, and then changed his mind--going back into his Book House. Then, after a moment of struggle (internal struggle), his mind changes, and he attempts the climb. The fence was an amazing visual, not just pertaining to the physical fence, but it almost made me think of one side of the fence is Christian as shy, cowardly, weak. On the other side, we have this new Christian who has grown into something much more. The character development in this chapter. Its just too perfect for words. As you can probably tell, character development is my favorite part of a story. In my opinion, if your story doesn't have it, then your story isn't a story. Pure and simple. Its an empty page, full of words.
But this was perfect. :)

and his long legs sticking up in front of him like the legs of a spider


That visual couldn't have been better. <3

Then he had landed—somewhat painfully, on his side and the arm he’d thrown out to catch himself—but there he was, nonetheless


This sentence seemed very forced, and the message strangled. As an action sentence goes, I don't think it worked well, and it didn't flow so well, either. A little suggestion, perhaps?

Then he landed somewhat painfully on his side and the arm he'd thrown out to catch himself--but there he was, nonetheless.


Just a suggestion. feel free to ignore. :)

Time for questions later, he thought, when his friend was back on his feet.


When I read this the first time, I had the impression that both sections were thought. But the second one says, "his friend", not "my friend", so it must not be thought? Anyway, if it isn't thought, then I think there should be more of a separator than a comma. If it is, then I think the person should be.

That is all I have for nitpicks. This was a near perfect chapter, but then again, all of yours are. Its just something I have grown used to when reading your stuff. Just get used to nitpicking the tiny things, and spend the rest of the review raving. Tis the only thing I can do here, so might as well do it as best as I can.

Till next time!
~Darth Timmyjake

Hey, for this part:

Then he had landed%u2014somewhat painfully, on his side and the arm he%u2019d thrown out to catch himself%u2014but there he was, nonetheless


Do you think I could change that first dash to a comma to make it read better?

Hmmm... Yus, I think so. :)

Thanks, bro.

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Deanie
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Deanie wrote a review Review · Mar 31, 2014

:DDD

Minerva and Christian are SO meant to be together! Look how sweet they are, giving gifts and promising he would read to her <3 I love it! It was also cool to see where she stored her books, and you had every little detail down, all the way to how Christian's voice got hoarse from talking more than he was used to.

I thought there might be something more to do with the mermaid, you know? So far Christian had been amazed with everything he saw, and now he gets to see an actual mermaid just hanging around a fountain! I thought he might be pleased he was the only one to have ever seen such a creature, or maybe related it to some book he had read. I got more the, "Oh cool, it's a mermaid let's stare at it a while and then move on," feel from it.

Beautiful descriptions as always. Christian seems to be less stumbling and shy as well, and seemed like he was having a good time. It's so hard to review when so many people have below me, I just have to stick to the plot reviews! But really, nothing to add other than the mermaid thingy.

Deanie x

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Messenger
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Messenger wrote a review Review · Mar 30, 2014

Messenger back for you and it looks like I finally passed Deanie! Not that you care but . . . yeah. So shall we get down to business. . . or will it be romance? I sure hope their isn't too much Blue :D

When he had got a little ways past the maze,

I don't like the use of the word "got" here. Maybe try something like "When he had walked a short way down the path" or something like that.

He supposed he had missed it the night before because of his hurry to reach the herb garden; past the trellis, the path dead-ended in a pleasant sitting area rather than leading any farther.

I like the fact that once again you have a sentence like this that really shows the humaness (man that isn't a word!) of the character. He isn't a perfect man who notices every little detail the first time through.

“I cannot leave the park. I know only the books that my visitors leave behind when they go. In more than one hundred and fifty years, these five are the only books that have been forgotten in the gardens.”

I'm just gonna make a wild and ridiculous assumption here :P He will give her some books? :PPP

Aww I really liked that ending. As much as I don't care for the . . . high-school like romance, I still really do like Minerva a lot. I kind of feel like I'd be acting just like Christian in this situation. :)

So now let's see what the fairies will do and maybe there will be some more action!

~Messenger

Deanie replied · Mar 31, 2014

Oh I have been passed by le Messenger... I guess this week I shall review like crazy and try to read all of the Book Man that has been posted so far!

Pssh like you'll beat me. You know how I get when I'm on a roll :P

Deanie replied · Mar 31, 2014

Yeah actually, you are a crazy reviewer. I can just try keeping up :P

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Kale
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Kale wrote a review Review · Mar 30, 2014

Hello again, BlueAfrica. I was going to get around to reviewing this anyway (eventually, after I caught up on reading all the previous chapters), but since it's Review Day, I'm here to review.

And I really don't have much to say about this except being alone for hundreds of years with only five books is so sad and terrible and just the feels. I had them.

I now feel a very strong compulsion to gather up all my books and hug them.

But anyways. Back to the story. I really wish this section was longer. This felt so short and I want more, which is great. I am glad that there are so many chapters ahead of me, because if I had been reading this as you posted it, I would probably be stalking your portfolio in anticipation of the next parts.

There was one sentence that felt super awkward to me: "He had never spoken for so long at once before—not since he was a child, anyway, and read aloud to his parents for practice." It's fine grammatically, but it reads so oddly, I think it would really benefit from a bit of restructuring.

But other than that, this was really cute, and while I saw Christian giving Minerva the book the moment she mentioned that was her full library, it was still really sweet.

/rambles out

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Iggy
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Iggy wrote a review Review · Mar 7, 2014

Babe <3

Okay, so you had me slamming my face into my screen at the mention of mermaid. Include more mermaids or I will stop reviewing k

.. I kid, I kid, but seriously I love mermaids <3 and you described this one pretty cool. I've never read a book with a purple-haired mermaid. ^^

Anyways, nitpick time. (You know I review as I read, right? So some of my reviews might be all over the place. Sorry if they are. >_>)

in another moment he had to stop.He set the book aside, disappointed, but Minerva said,


You know what's wrong with that sentence as well as I do. ;)

They sat together on the bench. Minerva adjusted the skirts of her tunic about her legs.


Both are such short sentences. Consider combining them?


Those are the grammar errors. I have two for the overall story:
1. I'm still not seeing enough emotion from Christian! Surely he feels nervous from her sitting so close to him, right? Does accidentally brushing her arm give him chills? What is his first impression when he saw her that evening? I want to know how he feels, especially about her. Show me what he thinks about Minerva, and how she makes him feel.
2. You use Christian's name a lot. Since he is the only male in these two chapters, you can use "he" a lot more often, you know! :)


Now that that's out of the way, I can return my focus on the story! And, more importantly, fangirling! Ahhh, Chriserva <3 or... Ministian? Eh, that one is fickle. Regardless, I like these two as a couple, even though I still kinda wish for Christian to be gay.

That comment about the park's magic keeping them young helps clear things up, on why Conrad is so old! But now I am curious to know why Minerva can't leave the park. Conrad can, so why can't she? I now wonder if she can even leave the Rose Garden, since it never talks about her joining the festival in the center of the park. I hope I find out soon.

I wonder what books he will bring her and guess what. Like Christian, I forgot the main reason why he was supposed to go down to the garden. Christian, remember the Good Magic? Man, he doesn't strike me as the short-term memory loss type of guy, so he must really like this chick, eh? ;)

My sister christened them "Chrinerva." But that's a good point...Imma have to go back and add some stuff there. Just little bits, I think. Especially since I imagine--after Christian starts reading and gets into the story, which is, after all, one of his favorites--he would forget about being nervous until he stops reading.



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