52 THE PALACE ON THE MOUNTAIN
They traveled together the rest of that day and most of the next. By early that evening, they had left the forest behind. In the mid-afternoon they came upon a clear lake beneath a cliff that reared up before them into a mountain range; it was there the river ended. They left it behind as well and began their ascent, although Christian was soon out of breath from the steep hike up the mountainside and Narodnaya seemed uneasy at leaving the water behind. She vanished from his side frequently and reappeared without warning.
“Why do you keep doing that?” Christian asked when she had done this for the seventh time.
I have rarely traveled so far from my lands. I do not like to leave them untended.
“How much farther is it?” Christian asked.
To the Sunforest? Far. But I am not taking you to the Sunforest. I could be there in an instant, but for you it would be weeks of travel—
Weeks! Weeks for a journey that should have been over by now. His lungs constricted at the thought. What if Goblin attacked again before he returned? What if Mr. Catcher and Minerva and the fairies perished? Oh, if only he had not been separated from Liza, coming through the portal—
Narodnaya’s voice cut sharply into his thoughts.
Calm yourself. I am taking you to Neva to see if you cannot get there faster. His home is only another day’s journey by foot.
“Who is Neva?” Christian asked, breathing deeply in an attempt to calm down. The name sounded familiar, but he couldn’t place it.
What do you mean? He is Neva. We have no other name for him. I think your kind would call him an angel.
Then Christian remembered: Neva was the magnificent being of Aurelia’s story, the being who had charged her and her sisters with the task of keeping Goblin trapped so he wouldn’t escape to Earth. The being who had banished her and her sisters when they failed. That didn’t make him sound like a particularly friendly person, so Christian asked, “Will you come with me?”
I do not like to leave my lands behind, but I will be with you as much as I am able.
With an effort, it seemed, she stopped disappearing as they traveled, though when he fell asleep that night in a small and sandy cave partway up the mountain he awoke before dawn to find her gone again. She reappeared after a while and he murmured sleepily, “Is everything alright?”
All is well, human. Do not be concerned on my account.
Christian fell asleep again.
It was the following evening that they approached the top of the mountain up which they had been traveling. A ways ahead of them they saw a palace shining with gilt and marble. The light from the sunset glanced off a glass dome rising high from the center of the building, blinding Christian as he followed Narodnaya toward the palace. The air this far up the mountain was colder and thinner than it had been in the lands below. His lungs were bursting, his bare feet freezing and sore from walking on rock and scrub, and his stomach whining in hunger. Narodnaya had brought him some fish the night before, but he had failed to produce a fire. He had not eaten but only looked on, feeling sick, as she ate them raw.
They kept on even as darkness fell and a chill wind blew all around them. The palace blazed with light shining warmly in every window, reminding Christian of the Book House. He felt as if he had not been home in years. He missed the Book House, in that moment, more than he missed Minerva or Conrad. He sighed without realizing it. Narodnaya looked sideways at him but said nothing.
Then, finally, as the stars rose higher in the sky, they stood before the palace. Christian reached out a hand and knocked on the golden doors.
53 THE GARDEN
The doors opened inward, apparently on their own. A hummingbird hovered in the doorway, turning its jeweled head between them expectantly.
He wants to know why we’ve come, Narodnaya said. He is one of Neva’s messengers.
“Oh,” Christian said, and then, to the bird, “I beg your pardon, but my name is Christian Abernathy and I’ve come to see Neva on a matter of some importance.”
The hummingbird cocked its head at him. Narodnaya gazed at it intently, so much so that a crease appeared in her forehead.
He wants—he wants to know who you are, that you should come to Neva’s doorstep and summon him without notice. I think that is what he wants. I cannot read the minds of beasts and birds as well as humans. They are not so simple-minded.
Christian decided to take offense on behalf of his species later. In the meantime he said to the bird, “I—well, I’m a human, from Earth, you know, which I understand is a matter of some concern for your master, and I need his help. If you please,” he added with a bow more graceful than he was feeling.
The bird hovered before him a moment longer, considering him with its head still cocked, and then it darted off through the palace. Christian looked after it uncertainly.
“Are we—are we meant to follow?” he asked.
I think not, but I cannot be sure. When I came before I charged through to see Neva without invitation, to demand he would stop the fairies from their attack on me.
“You did?” He could not imagine charging in on anyone so important. He would never intrude on the Mayor of the Town unannounced and unwelcome, nor his employer, nor even his barber—much less an angel. “How did that go?”
He was displeased, but he honored my request. Let us wait here until we are summoned.
Narodnaya fell silent, so they waited without speaking. The doors closed behind them without aid; the sound of their closing echoed around the entrance chamber. Its walls were gilt-covered. Several ornate doors circled it, though the hummingbird had gone through none of them but instead through an open area at the far end of the hall. Beyond this there was bright light, but the entrance hall itself was dimly lit by candles glowing in brackets on the walls.
They may have waited only a few minutes, though it felt much longer to Christian, who had never been anywhere so grand. All the same, he was glad to at least be indoors again, where it was warm and dry and windless and his feet had relief from the rough rock of the mountainside.
At last the hummingbird zipped back to them, tossing its head with a peep. Christian glanced back at Narodnaya, who nodded. The bird made its way back toward the far end of the entrance hall, slower this time so they could keep up. Christian’s bare feet slapped against the marble tiles as they followed.
The bird led them through many corridors and grand chambers, until finally they reached a glass door that opened into a steaming garden. Leafy plants towered over the grassy pathways (which felt glorious to Christian’s feet) or reached out to stretch across them. Somewhere there was water running, perhaps a fountain or an artificial brook or both, and unseen birds could be heard calling softly to each other from their perches. The glass dome Christian had seen from outside arched high overhead so he could see the stars through the canopy. He felt another wave of homesickness for the Book House.
In the center of the garden was a round grassy area reminiscent of the center of the maze in Celadon Park. The towering, leafy plants surrounded it, as did many beautiful, tropical flowers: hibiscus, orchids, fuchsia, and frangipani. The fountain Christian had heard stood in the middle, tinkling like a bell as water fell from the font into the stone bowl beneath it, in which several goldfish swam. Two massive trees at the far end had grown and twisted together into the shape of a throne. Bougainvillea clung to the back and the arms and the legs; and on the throne sat Neva.
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Timmy here!


Yay! We have more involvement with Naya, which is really cool. You have set up her character to be one that everyone will enjoy. In the beginning, I was unsure about who she was and what purpose she would play, because she was rather irritable and mean in the first chapter. xD But now I am seeing her character become more fleshed out, and her true personality is so much more inviting than my first initial impression of her. I am enjoying the chapters with her so very much!
Really, there isn't much I can comment on, and even less I can nitpick. One thing in common with your pieces, I am afraid. There is always a lot to rave about, but pretty much nothing to nitpick. Its just so perfect...
This feels... strange. Almost surreal, in fact. I do believe I have found a place where a comma should be! After "before". Am I right? *holds breath*
I thought this chapter was more of a scene setting than anything. It built up an image for us of this new place they are coming to, and the description was truly breathtaking. You have this way of describing a scene to us, and making it a perfect image in my mind, but not filling the page with useless added "fluff", taking away from what you have simply for the merit of having more words in your description. Each word means something, adds something, and add gravity to your story.
I'm afraid that is all I have for this chapter. The shortest review I have ever given you on Book Man. I feel bad, really. This chapter deserves more, but I just don't know how to give it.
Naya... too funny, and yet so serious while being so. I love her way of talking, which is always filled with humor and insults, and yet she doesn't even notice it. Christian does, though. Amazing job with that. xD
~Darth Timmyjake
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I'm so selfish.There *could* be a comma in that one spot, although it's not strictly necessary.OHHHH.. kay. I have to be content with nitpicks like that. xD
although I would prefer to be meanerHeh heh heh.
Iz me again. I did not copy Deanie :p Anyway I am back and ready to see how this story is going to end! Wait, it has to end?!?! NOOO!!
OK, I'm kind of confused, because shouldn't Minerva have been frozen one of the times when Christian talked to her? They come alive at night right? But he talked to her during the day I thought. Maybe I read it wrong.
I'm going to guess before reading on, that the light is magical stuff.
Well, well, well. Thanks to Iggy I know she isn't bad! but still, what on earth is she doing in there?
Wow . . . . . Goblin is a beast of a boss! As in he is so cool! I wasn't expecting him to be anything like this, nor for Imelda to die! She was a good person . . . .grr but anyway i'd love to hear Goblin's tale. I want to see what he has to say about himself. As evil as you have made him seem in this chapter, I still feel it isn't entirely his fault. People pushed him away and cast him out.
I love the idea of like an inside garden. So cool! I must now quickly go to the next chapters! I must see what happens to our glorious hero! Oh, I almost forgot, but how can Goblin do this stuff from a distance? creepy
~Messenger
Iz me again.
I feel a bit bad because only now did I realize you call your chapters pages xD I don't mind. And I don't really ever read chapter titles in books or so, which is no wonder I never really noticed... *moves on to review* Sorry if this review is disjointed... unlike usual I am writing it as I read, okay?
Funny. It was a bit weird to see Naro's name when Christian was mentioning the monsters he had tamed with a few kind words. Nothing wrong with it, I just saw her as more separate from the animals...
I liked the thoughts of Minerva as he was approaching Goblin's lair. Christian's a sweetheart <3
I think you mean "crows" instead.
IMELDA. YOU TRAITOR. WHY?!
- Oh wait, not traitor.
So suddenly Christian notices that Imelda's eyes turn brown again, but it's never mentioned that they were golden before? Also, Imelda just died, and all Christian says at first is where did the spirit go? I thought they were mates. And no one sounded surprised and Christian didn't even seem hurt when he first sees a friend who was entrusted with Conrad on the throne and commanding their death! I thought there could've been a little more drama there.
Wait a sec... does that mean Goblin captured Imelda solely for the purpose of using her for this trick or just using her body? Why would he even bother doing that?
Ah, that's what was happening to Morrow. I was wondering why he was acting so weird...
I am so looking forwards to hearing Goblin's story. Your description of the Morrow-not-Morrow-but-goblin was so cool. I wonder what Tirion might be thinking of too. Really there isn't much a thing I would change apart from adding more to the surprise of seeing Imelda there and letting the betrayal hurt a bit. The noticing of her eyes being different. Perhaps Christian could even notice just as Tirion loosens the bow and it is too late or something... and add a bit more sorrow in there.
Deanie x
"add a bit more sorrow in there" OH MY GOSH. I mean, I know you were talking about in reference to Imelda being possessed by Goblin and then dying, specifically, but...you will not say things like that by the end of this book. Or who knows, maybe you will and all the fans can hate you and me both.
Yesssss. Kill all the fans with the disease of the feeeeeeels.
hehehe *drops like*
I love this I love this I love this I love this.


FIRST OFF I was thinking that Imelda had betrayed us. You shoulda seen my face! I was like oh hells no, but then you mentioned her dying and I was like "whaaat? Killed that quickly?" but then Morrow started to have his compulsions and I knew - Goblin. He was possessing them. It's a shame that she died, though.
I just love the way you write, again and again. The things you put in this are so nice, even the things that could be considered unnecessary, but yet you make them necessary. Like the fact that Goblin could hear the thoughts and emotions of people above, and the bits about the people Christian loves, and the battle and etc. All of it just adds to the story and makes it what it is - interesting.
Goblin's reasons for doing this makes me sad. I honestly don't see a monster when I look at him; I see someone who's tired of being mistreated. Someone who's lonely. It makes me want to pity him, but it's because of him that Minerva has one arm and Conrad one leg and Graham Chelsea being torn in half and it's hard to pity him when we're losing people we love. But the fact that he has a story and is willing to share it is awesome, especially since it ties into the story, and the fact that Christian listens to everyone else's story, except his.
Overall, I just love this so much and cannot wait to hear his story.
My sister when she read this part and the next bit (which I will post momentarily): "I feel bad for Goblin now and I don't know how to feel about that." Except she was more shouty when she said it. Or, you know, texted it.