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The Book Man, Chapter 87 (Revised)

87 DEPARTURES

They walked in silence back to the rose garden, except for the soft words of the more open Fair-folk to the hellhounds, spiders, night-mares, and banshees accompanying them. As they walked, the bodies of those left dead on the Fairgrounds sank into the grass.

Christian was saddened by the sight. He felt Graham Chelsea, the contortionist from Rowan’s troupe, and the Fair-folk who had come to the fight with Neva deserved burials and markers just as much as Tirion.

“It’s as if they had never been,” Minerva said softly. He slipped his hand into hers. She squeezed his fingers.

When they reached the trellis, Neva turned to the crowd and said, “I will open the portal shortly. First you must choose: to stay or to go on.”

“What do you mean?” Conrad asked. He leaned against his wife; his good leg trembled under the weight of his body. Liza put an arm about his waist but leaned her head against his cheek wearily. Her own face was streaked with dirt and blood.

“All the creatures must return to the Otherworld, of course,” Neva said. “They will be too conspicuous in your world. There is nowhere for them to roam freely. But you humans, you have a choice. I warn you it is a costly one.”

He fell silent and then said, “Because my brother has been removed from Earth, the fairies shall return to their home as they were promised. Their magic goes with them. All those of you who have survived the centuries by sleeping in the Sunforest and coming here at night may stay on Earth or return to the Otherworld to dwell in the Sunforest. If you go, you will live out the rest of your natural life as it would have been had it not been prolonged. If you stay, all the years of your life will catch up with you and you will die with the dawn, for there will be no magic left in this world to keep you alive.”

The Fair-folk looked at each other uneasily.

“If you choose to live in the Sunforest,” Neva said, “a portion of land will be set aside for you and your descendants. I will see to it you have access to food and adequate shelter for the first year. After that it will be up to you.”

“Those are our choices?” Rowan asked.

“Those are your choices.”

“Not much of a choice at all, then, is it?” Finn said. “We’ll go, of course.”

There were murmurs of agreement from the others.

“Then I will open the portal,” Neva said. The space beneath the trellis wiggled, waved, and stilled. The Fair-folk lined up two by two and walked forward to disappear into it.

“You’ll come with us, won’t you, Barty?” Rowan asked her brother while Finn looked on anxiously. The old man smiled.

“My dear sisters, I wouldn’t dream of doing anything else.”

Conrad looked at Christian and pulled the bronze key to the park gate out of the pocket of his waistcoat.

“Here,” he said. “You’ll need this more than I will. I’m sorry to leave you, lad, but even after these past couple of nights, imminent death is a little too much for me to face.”

Then he turned to Liza and lowered his voice.

“I owe you more apology than I could ever give,” he said. “When we were married, I thought I’d be happy because I’d had enough of magic and wonderment, and I just wanted to settle down and have a normal life. And then I started missing the magic and the wonder, and I took it out on you sometimes, and then the secrets I kept, well—”

“What are you saying?” Liza asked. “Are you going with them?”

“I must. I’m—well, I’m a hundred and twelve, to tell you the truth. I’d say that’s enough years to catch up with me, wouldn’t you?”

The balloon-artist bit his lip as he gazed at his wife, but it took a moment for Liza to respond. She twisted her wedding band around her finger as she searched for the right words. It glinted in the light of the gas lamps.

“It’s not so much that you lied,” she said, and then amended, “Not only that you lied. It’s that you told him—”gesturing at Christian, who flushed—“after a few months of friendship, and never me in thirty-six years of marriage.”

Her husband’s face scrunched up in an anxiety Christian had rarely seen there before.

“It wasn’t anything like—it’s just that—well, you saw the kind of life he was living,” Conrad said at last. “He was stuck, and I—”

“So was I, Conrad. I’ve been stuck for years, waiting for something exciting to come along. I should’ve gone out to find it myself, instead, but I waited and waited and nothing ever came of it.”

The balloon-artist looked at her as if seeing her for the first time. Then he said, “I never knew.”

And then, nervously: “I know I can’t ask you to start over, but that’s your waiting done, if you want it to be.”

“I don’t understand,” Liza said.

Her husband took a deep breath and said, “Dearest, I’m asking you to come with me.”

“Asking—” Her face broke into the first smile Christian had seen from her in a long, long time. “You mean it?”

“So you’ll come?” Conrad said hopefully.

“Of course,” Liza said, and she kissed his nose. And though he was sad to see them go, Christian was all smiles as the Smithsons hugged him and Minerva goodbye and disappeared through the portal. Then a wail rose up behind him. It was the two ringmasters, clinging to Morrow’s shoulders and weeping bitterly. Tears dripped from the end of the Rover’s nose.

“Aunties, don’t cry. I love you both more than I can say, but—” His voice caught in his throat; he coughed until it was clear. “I’ve never yet come back from a fight without him.”

“Aunties, you cruel boy!” Rowan said through her tears. “Good heavens, how long has it been since you called us that?”

Finn dabbed at her monocle with a handkerchief. “Thirty years, at least—”

“At least, yes—”

“Aren’t you—aren’t you going with them?” Christian asked over the ringmasters’ renewed sobs. Morrow shook his head. One by one, the sisters straightened, righted their top hats (much battered from the battle), and dried their eyes.

“Well, Mr. Abernathy,” Rowan said with a sniff. “You’ll take care of him for us, won’t you? We’d feel so much better.”

“Certainly,” Christian said, turning pink. He nodded to Morrow. “You’re welcome to stay with me. I’ve always lived alone, so I haven’t got an extra bedroom, but—well, we’ll figure something out.”

Morrow smiled crookedly. “Thank you.”

The ringmasters lavished his face with kisses and fresh tears. He kissed them each lightly on the forehead, wet-eyed and weak-chinned. Then he watched with a sigh as the friends he had known since his infancy vanished into the portal behind their brother.

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TimmyJake
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Timmy here!

This will be a pitiful review, because I don't have much to say. But I shall try.

So I would say that the part about the fairies leaving and so their world would be devoid of magic, thus making everyone in there die by the next day - it was very nice. I loved it. Just one more thing that adds to your story. It was almost humorous how fast everyone made their decision. Once Neva told them, they were like: "Oops. Time to go." - no hesitation required. I think the part with Conrad was very nice? his leaving to go to the Sunforest? One thing I think you told us before, but I completely forgot about, was his age. I am pretty sure you told us in the beginning of the story... somewhere, or at least hinted that he was older than he looked. This chapter solidified that. And gosh, is he old.

As far as emotions go, the part with Morrow and his "aunts" was simply perfect. Although, to be honest, this kind of emotion hadn't really popped up earlier in the story - or at least I hadn't seen it. I mean, I knew that they knew him, and knew him rather well. How Rowan(?) went to his house and barged in like she owned the place when we first me Morrow... well, that told us they were at least friends. But I wasn't expecting this kind of emotion... perhaps because all of this wailing didn't really seem like their thing? When I think of the ringmasters, I don't think of them crying - not at first, anyway. I think before they started to cry, or did cry, they would put on a façade beforehand with their usual jokes. Something. It just seemed to drastic on the sad-dramatic side of things for them. They're always dramatic, but in a funny way. Perhaps they could attempt at being funny, and then break down? I don't know. It just seemed to sudden for me.

I would have liked to see more emotion from Liza in this chapter. You did an amazing job showing Conrad's emotions, I think. But with Liza... with her, you seemed to stick to only her dialogue, which wasn't enough for me. I think just a little bit more movement and expressions (like the first time you reference her action in the convo, with the ring. I loved that) thrown in there for her would help that part immensely. Other than that, for their talk, it was perfect. I loved the dialogue, I loved their argument/notsoargument. I just loved that part so much. <3

And though he was sad to see them go, Christian was all smiles as the Smithsons hugged him and Minerva goodbye and disappeared through the portal


NO NO NO NO

*coughs* Well, anyway. This part seemed a tad rushed for me. Well, let's rephrase. It seemed really rushed to me. Christian knows he isn't going to see them again... ever, and the reader has been with these characters since chapter one - or at least Conrad, I believe. And you just said their goodbye's in like one sentence and poof! - they're gone. Could you give us a little bit longer goodbye? Like maybe a paragraph or two? I think it's an important enough part to give some focus to. Perhaps it's just me, though. I just think there should be more of a goodbye than a simple sentence telling us what happened. I want to see and feel the goodbye, because it all happened so fast I barely took notice - and I didn't feel sad at all at their leaving because Christian didn't seem sad. You told us he was sad. You didn't show us. Perhaps you could work with that part a teensy bit? :)

Like I said before, the part with Morrow and the Ringmasters was very emotional. I liked that. ^.^ Only two chapters left. I am sad. :(
~Darth Timmyjake

Perhaps they could attempt at being funny, and then break down?


This idea pleases me immensely.

I want to see and feel the goodbye, because it all happened so fast I barely took notice - and I didn't feel sad at all at their leaving because Christian didn't seem sad.


That bit did seem to go too fast. Grr, I just keep toying with this chapter and I can't figure out how to get it right...

On that note, a question: Did you feel like the thing with Liza and Conrad was too easily resolved? You didn't say so, but...I mean, they've been married for thirty-six years and Conrad never told her about any of this stuff. Now, she does want to go to the Otherworld, if only because she's tired of being stuck in her life...and she's not going to tell her husband of thirty-six years to shove off and find himself another woman, BUT...I mean, that is a marriage essentially based on thirty-six years of lies about who he really is, which she just dismisses by going, "Wow, you're actually asking me to come along? Why, YES, you sexy beast."

So...how did you feel about the wrap-up of their affairs? Should it leave off a bit more uncertain, or...? Give me suggestions!

hmmm... maybe make Conrad beg a little more? Maybe HAVE HIM GO ON HIS KNEES.

YES

But...he has one peg-leg now. That might be a bit difficult to achieve.

"Look at me, Liza! I'm down on my knees! Well, I mean, you know. I'm actually not on my knees, but I would be if I didn't have this wooden leg..."

hmph. Sorry, that's just what people usually do and I forgot. :P

Heh heh heh. If it wasn't such a difficult moment, I'd probably just have him say that...but she'd still have to react appropriately.

Hello, there love!
Aurora here with a review day review!
I've red some of the previous chapters, but not all- or even most- of them :).

No grammatical errors/nitpicks to speak of that I caught, love. Great job!

This is great. I especially enjoyed your description- your figurative language is amazing!
One thing I wanted was the reactions of people when Neva offers them their choice. Is it shock on their faces? Surprise? Confusion?

Liza put an arm about his waist but leaned her head against his cheek wearily.
Eh? I mean, I know what you're saying, and there's nothing grammatically wrong with it, but... maybe just change cheek to shoulder :)

Your pacing was great, if a little slow near the end- but maybe not change that; these are goodbyes, after all, and goodbyes aren't the most abrupt of things.

And furthermore, in the last paragraph, who is he? I felt like first you were talking about Morrow and then Christian... but I could be wrong. I was still confused though, so maybe clear that up? :)

I have no further advice to give you; great job, love!

Keep writing,
Aurora

Liza put an arm about his waist but leaned her head against his cheek wearily.
Eh? I mean, I know what you're saying, and there's nothing grammatically wrong with it, but... maybe just change cheek to shoulder


Liza is nearly as tall as her husband, so it would have to be the top of his shoulder if it was his shoulder...but I'll have to think about how to word that so it makes sense with her height but doesn't read bizarrely.

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Freya13 wrote a review · Sat Sep 06, 2014 1:01 pm

Wow this is amazing o.o
You use such amazing figurative language and amazing writing that is emotive yet doesn't get so emotion-filled that you can't interpret anything else, as some works seem to. I couldn't pick up on anything in particular or nothing, and I'm like the single pickiest spaz there is, so that shows just how awesome this is ;)
Yew, its pretty cool dude! I'm wondering if it's obvious that I'm trying to increase the word count so that I can get more points? Sorry about that, it's just I really want to publish something but it costs FIVE HUNDRED POINTS like seriously, that's a bit cruel if you've only just joined! Hehe you probably hate people do this, so soz!
Anyway, this is super awesome writing, and sad :( but you're a gifted writer ;)xD



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