Hey, there, therealme! FireFox here to review your poem on behalf of the Apple Dumpling Gang! (Yes, that is our real name.)
Okay, to tell you the truth, I typically don't review, read, or write poetry, but I took a leap of faith the review day and chose a few poems to review, yours included, so forgive me if I make some comments and show my stupidity in regard to not exactly knowing the rules of poetry...
I absolutely adore the uniformity of your stanzas. It drives me nuts (most likely due to my OCD) when poems have mix-matching stanzas with different numbers of lines in each stanzas, things that don't rhyme or sound forced. All of this flowed very well and I enjoyed the truthfulness of the piece. It is most definitely a reality in this chaotic world. I think that if you elaborated and lengthened this poem even more, your readers could relate even more to your piece. Give real life examples and continue providing imagery within each stanza to emphasize your point. Though this is a short poem, the imagery is unbelievable. You flowed these lines and stanzas surprisingly well and with ease, it seems. Very well done! I am impressed.
-FireFox
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