A Faund Stand.

Hey Jordin! I'm going to review this! And it looks good, but I do have some advice/tips.

First off, as someone who thinks that title matters, I really do like your title!

So first off I'd just like you to know, that you're poetry is pretty. But, you must remember that rhyming cannot be done at all costs. And in this case "began" is past tense while "stands" is present. So it isn't suppose to work that way, but that said, it doesn't really matter to me as it flows so nicely. But because of my like for these type of things, i will give you examples on how to still make it work.

"As dawn begins, A faun stands," It may not rhyme with the "hands" but it does work out fairly well so no worries.

Now for your third line, again, I understand wanting to rhyme, in fact I love rhyming so I'm thrilled. I would advise though for someone to better understand while reading, you put a period after "Whit splotches of sands," and that you don't capitalize the "With".

I only suggest this because when I first read that I had wondered what "splotches of sands" had to do with anything. I had to read it multiple times to get it. Now, this may not happen to everyone, but I just thought it might be better to at least put the period there. But great job on the rhyming I liked it.

For the line after that I would suggest: "And though men are in the land," Man is in the land has a disconnecting ring to it, that makes it hard to say, and it would be more clear to talk in plural since I believe when you say "man" you mean the whole collective group.

I really like the line after that. It's so sweet.

For the last one I would suggest: "With a strand of life left at hand." Or "With only a strand of life left at hand."

Overall, I though it painted a beautiful picture of a faun trying to stand. I liked that you chose you write about that! I also like the classy way you chose to go about writing it. I hope you take a look at some of my advice/suggestions!

Keep writing!

--And keep on dreaming on!

Good poem buddy but some of your grammar is a bit off.

E.g. " As dawn began, a faun stands" that doesn't quite make sense. It is kinda like you are combining past tense with the present. Also, I sort of get this vibe that you just added certain words in there jut for sake of making them rhyme. Poems don't have to rhyme Though I could be wrong. Anyway, you did a pretty good job, keep it up and work on it for next time.

Alright. Let me begin. I love the picture that you were able to add. It helps give an explanation to the poem. The rhythm and flow is fabulous, but a few spots seem a bit forced.

Okay. I don't believe that italics are necessary, but I might be wrong.

Without hands, In fertile lands,

With splotches of sands,

With a strand of life left in hand.

Ok I am going to give you a quick review. I might be a little blatant so don't take it personally.
Cutting straight to the point I think there are some improvements this may need.
Firsty is rhyming a word with itself. You rhyme land and stand twice which does not do justice for the poem. I felt it sort of broke the flow and the feeling. Another aspect with your rhyming is you seem very hooked on the -and suffix. It can work as a nice constant within the poem but here I do not think you have utilized it. You use quite common -and words, repeat them, it seems like you wrote sone lines to fit around the word and others just stuck it at the end. I advise you go find a rhyming dictionary. I am sure they have them online. I had a real book one which I used to love to read. You could try this poem using a variety of rhymes if there are no other suitable -and rhymes.

Content:
I actually like the message you are conveying. It does give a very nature feeling. I don't like the line "without hands" the fertile bit is ok but no animals have hands. It doesn't make sense. I suppose you are trying to convey "without help" except even if it's mother was helping she wouldn't have hands anyway. Also when you used hand in the last line I don't think it as a concluding word gives it justice. I think you should take the first line and put it at the end. Maybe 'hand' is not a fitting word in this poem.
I really like all of the other lines in this poem what they convey. It is short and sweet. Very good.

Sorry for my rant on rhyming, Its just something I have always enjoyed and felt like I had a knack for.

Happy writing. Good work.