The Winds Of Change.

wow, very nicely done. It was very creative to create a definition (however ambiguous ) for an expression taken for granted. It had a nice elegant feel all through the first stanza, and I really congratulate you on your creativity.

A little criticism, sorry. You changed your structure in the middle of the poem, and even added rhyme where there wasn't any the stanza before. Other than that, just a little punctuation check (maybe add a comma in between the two independent clauses of sentence three), and watch capitalization.

Otherwise, really good, I enjoyed reading it. Keep up the good work.

I'm sorry, but I'm going to quote most of your poem.

"The winds of change arouse in light," -I don't think arouse is the right word to use there. maybe arises, or just arise? and put a full stop instead of a comma.

"they wave the grass they level mountains," that should probably be: "(capital)They wave the grass;(semicolon) they level mountains.(full stop)"

"the billow of them made me sane," capitalize "the," This line kind of confused me I don't know why. How can winds of change's billows make you sane? But here I am questioning poetry again.

"and gave me Christ who lives abouv all else," obviously fix abouv, also, put a full stop at the end. Oh, here I'm thinking 'oh great, this is going to be about religion,' but I don't see that evident in the rest of your piece. Again, how does change give you Christ?

"the winds of change do not change," capitalize "the."

"but are change themselves," full stop at the end of themselves.

"you can feel them they are there" should be "(capital) You can feel them: (semicolon or colon. I suggest colon) they are there,(comma)"

"yet you cannot see them." this is okay.

"They cry in the night," this is okay. but I would change the coma to a semicolon.

"laugh in the daylight" either put a full stop here or in the middle of the next line.

"(W)with a merry sound(. or not) (T)they change us," so depending on what you want to say, the full stop should be ^here or at the end of the line before this one. Don't forget to capitalize. Also, there should be a full stop at the end of this line as well.

"they are great" capitalize, full stop at the end.

"they are amazing in their light" capitalize

"as they cry in the night" this is okay

"as if they were fire light." this is also okay.

This poem really mad no sense to me. I didn't get the symbolism, and I wasn't sure if you had a rhyme scheme or not. the last stanza especially I did not understand. are we still talking about wind of change? what is amazing? change? I just don't know what you're talking about. sorry. it sounded pretty good though, I can see you have lots of talent.

This. Is. Beautiful.

It really is, and I have no problem with some of the way you put it, because I don't always arrange things the "proper" way when I write poems. But then, with that said, I think this would be much, much easier to understand, with a better format. And with a few tweaks here and there.

Here is how it could be better arranged:
"The winds of change arouse in light, they wave the grass as they level mountains.
the billow of them made me sane and gave me Christ who lives on high.

"the winds of change do not change but are change themselves" this is very, very confusing.

I would advise you change the entire sentence to:
"The winds of change do not change themselves, but move as you feel them, they go from here to there, yet you cannot see them."

and I would also advise you put it like this:

"The winds of change do not change themselves,
but move as you feel them,
they go from here to there,
yet you cannot see them."

The last part can be arranged as:
"They cry in the night and laugh in the daylight
with a merry sound they change us,
they are they are great,
they are amazing, because in their light,
as they cry in the night,
it is as if they were fire light.

I must be honest, reading over it again and again, it does confuse me quite a bit, and I wonder whether some of it makes sense. Then again, I understood most of it, and I believe it is very imaginary.

So it is beautiful, but I would suggest you look it over and try to take some of my advice.

P.S I like the title!

This was really beautiful ^-^ and I thought it was lovely when you mentioned Christ, it was unexpected for me lol Your wording and setting are both top-notch, I wouldn't change a thing about your personal style, it's really good. But I agree 100% with "screamandshout", add commas and also, it'd flow easier and more freely if you broke the lines down like so:

"They cry in the night,
laugh in the daylight
with a merry sound they change us,
they are great
they are amazing in their light
as they cry in the night
as if they were fire light."

other than that I thought it was beautiful ^-^
The more you write, the better you get at it c:

~Catnip~

i like this poem its very deep and i love the use of personification of the wind and how it affect us like an entity.
but yet when you say the line
"the winds of change do not change but are change themselves"
kind of confuses me as a reader i think if you broke i up a little with commas or seperate lines it would add more drama and might be a bit easier to read.
but other than that it is a really good deep poem and its very detailed but still allows your own imagination to infer into each line making the poem more personal. i liked it thanks for sharing!:P

Alright, so first off, I really enjoy the poem itself. But the layout makes it a little difficult to read. Since poems are usually shorter lines, it through my reading off a bit. Particularly in the second "stanza." Also, 'daylight' is only one word.It would be better to write it more like this-

"They cry in the night,
laugh in the daylight
with a merry sound they change us,
they are great
they are amazing in their light
as they cry in the night
as if they were fire light."

There are also lots of places to change the punctuation, but that all reflects on how you intend the poem to sound when you read it, so I can't really make the call as to where. Poetry is very personal in that way.

But as I said, I love the concept you have going here. Keep writing!