I second Starve on that title choice! The poem for it is really interesting as well. I like that the 'blackout' lines make it feel like it's been 'condensed' into the essentials, maybe reflecting that the speaker is sitting by themselves in a room. "fairy lights" developing into "gospel truths" is a really memorable images sequence as well. A nice start to NaPo!
What was the source text for the black out poem? It's neat and has some great word choice. Love the metaphor you chose for poem two. Keep on rolling, looking forward to reading your poetry this month atlast!
you should know i am a time traveler & there is no season as achingly temporary as now
the source for the first poem was a song titled "sun machine" by bears in trees. they use a lot of great metaphor and imagery in their music. here's a link to it!
I love these! It's been a while since I've seen a blackout poem and you did a splendid job with that one ^^ I also super love the imagery of anxiety/poison -- it's a nice parallel!
"u and rina are systematically watering down the grammar of yws" - Atticus "From the fish mother to the fish death god." - lehmanf "A fish stole my identity. I blame shady" - Omni [they/he]
The formatting for that last poem is extremely fun to read especially as someone who loves those heavily formatted / stylized poems like me! Also I heavily relate to the feeling of @_@ with iambic pentameter so that was fun to see that expressed in sort of an "anti-sonnet" here. Funnily there is actually a form of poetry that is called a "nonet" that are actually quite fun to write!
Still a week left of NaPo to go! <3 Happy writing! And thank you for sharing all these really creative pieces.
you should know i am a time traveler & there is no season as achingly temporary as now
When I use caps I do not want you to read it like a little screech, I want you to read it like a 5,000 year old ogre with the strength of 10,000 men. — avianwings47
Still a week left of NaPo to go! <3 Happy writing! And thank you for sharing all these really creative pieces.
