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Clo's is done, TLG's not yet – but I kind of understood she wouldn't need the review after all. I'll take care of it later, though.

I have none in queue!

Hey would you remind saying something for me? Its a little long, and it has gay romance in it. Its also rated R, because some of the things I guess could be considered 'suggestive' (I'm quoting a friend of mine), but nothing too terrible happens. Just PM me if you don't want to...
Here's the link:
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Thanks if you do review, and if not I understand!
MV

Demi!

Mind going over this for me?

Thank you!

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Hey, Demeter! -wavewavewave-

So, should you be so inclined, there's this three-part poem I just cooked up. I really want to make it something great, so please be as harsh as you can on it, alright? Tear it up! And, some extra requests would be to share what it makes you think of as you read it, your response to it {I wrote this in the thread, but hey}, and also maybe picking which title you like best?

It's either.

Seasons of Ice or His Eyes

Thank you so much!

-Hannah-

Both done, no line

Hey, Demeter! I'll take advantage of the no-queue, if you don't mind.

Anyway, would you mind doing this for me?

In Such a Night

It's romantic fiction, just to give you heads-up. And it's kinda long, so if you want me to pay you for your time, just PM me and I'll hand the points over.

~Sunny

Hello. =]

A Jigsaw Heart

It's my lame attempt at poetry. Slaughter it please?

I lubs you. =]

~JFW1415

*nudges*
Hey Demi...Would you mind? ._.
Wrong Answer.

*dumps trayload of chocolate chip cookies on Demi's lap*
Fresh from the oven

You got 'em, I need 'em.

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Thanks.

I was wondering if you could review the first four chapters of my book?

Chapter 1 & 2

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Chapter 3 and 4

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i would like as much detail as you see fit to give it, and please please be honest

Thanks so much xx

200397, Meep(:, Galerius and wiccaryan have to wait a little, unfortunately. I'm sorry that I haven't had the time to review them yet, but I will.

Now I hope that there wouldn't be more requests until I've done those. Thank you!


Demeter
xxx

http://www.youngwriterssociety.com/topic45764.html

http://www.youngwriterssociety.com/topic46616.html

chapter 8 of The mansion

Here is a brief of the story so far:

Time: nineteen fifties

Jacques (Jack) bought a small mansion just outside London. In the mansion he noticed that his chocolate cake was missing and found out that the culprit was a gnome from Lapland (Mike or Miko). He and Miko become friends. They steal a sword.
Miko (Mike) takes Jack to the world where the fantasy creatures live (Well most of them at least) The underworld.
Miko goes to play poker in casinos while Jack goes sightseeing. He meets an elf girl called Melody who shows Jack around the town. They are attacked by a gang of revolutionaries who want to take the power away from the current government. In all means necessary. They get to a physical confrontation and Jack ends up getting injured.

While you were browsing this forum, I sneaked in and bumped this thread.


In other words, I'm ready for your works again!

Luna 2
Action/Adventure Fiction
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You're gonna want to read Luna 1 first I'm not asking you to review it, but you certainly can.

Here's the link for Luna 1 topic50230.html

'Tis done. =)