So, most of you know that I'm not a poetry writer. I've done very little in my life, and haven't really explored the craft. However, today was poetry day in my school, and after completing tons of poetry workshops I had lines of a poem drifting around my head, so I wrote it.
That said, please explain yourself fully in your critiques. I really know nothing about poems, so general comments and information on poems will be very greatly appreciated. =] Mainly punctuation and line breaks - I'm clueless on those.
A Jigsaw Heart
I have a puzzle – a jigsaw.
A single unit broken
into a thousand pieces.
Leaving it the way it is,
scattered everywhere?
The thought makes me ache.
I’ve tried to do it on my own,
to put it back together,
but it seems broken beyond repair.
My hands move in all the right ways
press together all the right pieces,
Yet nothing seems to fit.
But you – you are a master.
Surely even this mangled mess
will cause you no trouble.
The parts are broken
nearly beyond recognition.
It’s an easy task for you,
but I’m not very good at puzzles.
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