You Know You Want Some [re-opened]

Demeter · 2008-11-30T10:28:58Z

Hi! Because you have entered, it seems you would like a review from me. That's wonderful. What I'd rather not review: Fanfiction Fantasy Sci-fi Very long chapters Multiple chapters - give me one at a time.* What I'd rather review: Everything else. But please keep in mind that I can't really go that deep into poems - I'll try my best, but I might not always understand them. ;) What I focus on while reviewing: Nit-picks (like grammar, spelling, structure, awkwardly phrased sentences) Believability etc. (eg. in dialogue) Overall impression Rhyme scheme/rhythm (in poetry) Imagery (in poetry) What you should do: Give me the link and genre of the piece you want to be reviewed. If you want, you can say a few words about the piece. *What you shouldn't do: Give me more than one piece of yours at a time. (If you do this, I will most likely only review the first one.) After I've reviewed that one, you can ask for more. Payment: None. Although, I might like you better if you treated me with some chocolate every now and then. In queue: None! Please note: I hope you can be patient. I will do what I've promised to do, but sometimes I'm more busy and can't do the review very quickly, especially if there's a queue. Thanks for understanding. :) Fire away! ;)

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Tue Feb 03, 2009 4:21 pm

Demeter says... · Tue Feb 03, 2009 4:21 pm

Rascalover, yours is finally done.

With that said, I re-open this thread.

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Wed Feb 04, 2009 10:06 pm

*DaughteroftheMoon* says... · Wed Feb 04, 2009 10:06 pm

Lyrics

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Sun Feb 15, 2009 12:03 pm

Demeter says... · Sun Feb 15, 2009 12:03 pm

It is done.

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Sun Feb 15, 2009 4:07 pm

deleted2 says... · Sun Feb 15, 2009 4:07 pm

http://www.youngwriterssociety.com/topic43605.html

Please?

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Sun Feb 15, 2009 9:14 pm

Lord Anzius says... · Sun Feb 15, 2009 9:14 pm

Please review this I'll give you a cookie

Ashurpanibal prologue

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Thu Feb 26, 2009 7:42 pm

Demeter says... · Thu Feb 26, 2009 7:42 pm

Hey, peoples – no line!

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Sat Feb 28, 2009 1:39 am

Anna09 says... · Sat Feb 28, 2009 1:39 am

I have a short story that is streamline fiction I suppose

I am in desperate need of a detailed review, as it is both a school project, and something that I hope to submit to magazines.

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Sat Feb 28, 2009 1:05 pm

Lauren says... · Sat Feb 28, 2009 1:05 pm

Hi, Dem

I feel so cheeky asking, but would you review this for me? It's Other Fiction. I will return the favour.
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Sat Feb 28, 2009 11:08 pm

asxz says... · Sat Feb 28, 2009 11:08 pm

Hi, Demeter! Could you please review these for me?
Prologue, Part 1
Prologue, Part 2
Prologue, Part 3.

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Mon Mar 02, 2009 7:41 pm

Galerius says... · Mon Mar 02, 2009 7:41 pm

Hello, I would appreciate it if you critiqued my newest poem: topic43953.html

Please be harsh, I beg of you.

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Sat Mar 07, 2009 12:46 am

Lost_in_dreamland says... · Sat Mar 07, 2009 12:46 am

Could you possibly review this for me, Demi?

I will most definitely return the favour, just remember to bug me about it. xD
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Sat Mar 07, 2009 6:33 am

Demeter says... · Sat Mar 07, 2009 6:33 am

Of course!

I have still asxz's number three and Galerius' to do, and I'll be away the whole day, but I'll get to them soon!

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Mon Mar 09, 2009 3:29 pm

Demeter says... · Mon Mar 09, 2009 3:29 pm

All done.

No line... *nudge nudge*

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