You Know You Want Some [re-opened]

Demeter · 2008-11-30T10:28:58Z

Hi! Because you have entered, it seems you would like a review from me. That's wonderful. What I'd rather not review: Fanfiction Fantasy Sci-fi Very long chapters Multiple chapters - give me one at a time.* What I'd rather review: Everything else. But please keep in mind that I can't really go that deep into poems - I'll try my best, but I might not always understand them. ;) What I focus on while reviewing: Nit-picks (like grammar, spelling, structure, awkwardly phrased sentences) Believability etc. (eg. in dialogue) Overall impression Rhyme scheme/rhythm (in poetry) Imagery (in poetry) What you should do: Give me the link and genre of the piece you want to be reviewed. If you want, you can say a few words about the piece. *What you shouldn't do: Give me more than one piece of yours at a time. (If you do this, I will most likely only review the first one.) After I've reviewed that one, you can ask for more. Payment: None. Although, I might like you better if you treated me with some chocolate every now and then. In queue: None! Please note: I hope you can be patient. I will do what I've promised to do, but sometimes I'm more busy and can't do the review very quickly, especially if there's a queue. Thanks for understanding. :) Fire away! ;)

UrbanNomad

Gender

Points 1072

Reviews 23

Wed Oct 19, 2011 3:21 am

UrbanNomad says... · Wed Oct 19, 2011 3:21 am

Hello there reviewer!
Can you please help me out viewtopic.php?t=88518
Any advice will go a long way on my poem
Thanks

joshuapaul

Supporter

Gender

Points 14013

Reviews 280

Wed Oct 19, 2011 6:29 pm

joshuapaul says... · Wed Oct 19, 2011 6:29 pm

[url=http://www.youngwriterssociety.com/topic89134.html]Damn yes, I want some.[URL]

Read my latest

Jalmoc

Gender

Points 561

Reviews 67

Sun Dec 04, 2011 2:55 pm

Jalmoc says... · Sun Dec 04, 2011 2:55 pm

Hi Demeter.

You think you could look this over for me?

It's a romance, and I'm attempting to write a novel. I want to know how I did on the first part. You don't have to if you don't, but I'd appreciate it!

viewtopic.php?t=91090

Attachments

: Here's some chocolate for you!!!; images.jpeg (4.7 KiB) Viewed 251 times

If you don't take a chance, you'll always live your life in regret, so let your heart show it's true colors and admit your feelings!

Tis not the blade that took your life, but the Assassin behind it.

When Reality has all but fallen away, recreate your own world

Demeter

Supporter

Gender

Points 35199

Reviews 878

Wed Jan 02, 2013 2:25 pm

Demeter says... · Wed Jan 02, 2013 2:25 pm

Re-opened! Please read the first post before requesting

"Your jokes are scarier than your earrings." -Twit

"14. Pretend like you would want him even if he wasn't a prince. (Yeah, right.)" -How to Make a Guy Like You - Disney Princess Style

Got YWS?

Shady

Gender

Points 3330

Reviews 938

Thu Jan 03, 2013 10:29 pm

Shady says... · Thu Jan 03, 2013 10:29 pm

Hey Demeter!

I've got a poem that I'd like reviewed, particularly your opinion as to whether or not it's worthy of being entered in a writing contest in which I will be competing against highschoolers.

work.php?id=98548

Thanks a ton!

~Shady

"u and rina are systematically watering down the grammar of yws" - Atticus
"From the fish mother to the fish death god." - lehmanf
"A fish stole my identity. I blame shady" - Omni
[they/he]

ShakespeareWallah

Gender

Points 1053

Reviews 133

Sun Jan 06, 2013 7:48 am

ShakespeareWallah says... · Sun Jan 06, 2013 7:48 am

Hey Demeter,

Could you review this short -story for me? It's called:Plastic

Thanks!

*coco

Gender

Points 24514

Reviews 130

Fri Jan 11, 2013 11:42 pm

*coco says... · Fri Jan 11, 2013 11:42 pm

Hey, coco here!

I've recently started a new novel and I would love to get some good reviews, if that's okay!

Take as long as you need

Title: Dark Lies
Genre: Mystery/suspense
Link: work.php?id=98967#comments

Thank you!

"Do you know what my heart says now? It says that I should forget about politics and be with you. No matter what. You're a true Queen, a Queen any King would kill for." - Prince Francis ♕

PurpleMoment

Gender

Points 1813

Reviews 19

Thu Jan 24, 2013 2:26 pm

PurpleMoment says... · Thu Jan 24, 2013 2:26 pm

My name is Ashley. I found this poem among my things. It's from a few years ago. I don't remember when or why I wrote it, but I'm quite impressed with it myself and I would love your feedback on it.

work.php?id=99293