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Honestly, it was a good attempt for your second poem. However, I feel that this would have worked better as a free-verse piece than as a lyrical rhyme piece. The ...

Wow. This was brilliant, sorrowful, beautiful, and depressing all in one. Right up my alley. I thoroughly enjoyed your amount of detail and figurative; it helped improve the eerie, suspenseful ...

Your formatting was odd and slightly confusing, but if it's not the website screwing up again, I'm guessing that's what you were going for. With a story like this, odder ...

I see that there is a bit of a joke to this haiku- which, just saying, I think it was great that you used this format. I don't think it ...

The build up of the poem was nice, sort of bitter and depressing in a sense, but I liked it. I think it was a very well written piece, even ...

Wow. That's what I have to say. This is an amazing first effort in poetry, especially since it's not only a narrative-style, but a rhyming narrative-style. I like the usage ...

This really hit home for me. You said so much in just these three, simple sentences, enough that you covered an entire story in seventeen words. The title fit perfectly ...

Hi, I'm here to review your piece. Sorry, it may just be a bunch of jumbled up thoughts, but that's what I'm known for. First, the criticism- "The young boy ...

Just the start of the poem draws in the reader. You did a very good job at capturing the audience's attention. The imagery is well created and I like your ...

I liked the simplicity of the poem; it was fairly straightforward, which is always a good thing for me, as the reader. Free verse has always been something I like. ...

Glad you posted this, man. So once again, I have to say that it was beautifully horrific. I loved how the interactions between Emi and Benjamin didn't seem to change ...

This poem has a very sad, melancholy feel to it. But, I enjoyed the imagery you used to paint the picture for the reader. Your word choice could have been ...

I love the imagery you have here; made it simply a joy to read. Your word choice was very good as well, and I liked the message that you had ...

Well, the first thing I would like to point out is that you spelled "Prologue" wrong. Not like it's the worst possible thing; we've all done it. But I thought ...

You used a lot of imagery in this poem, and I think it painted a very nice picture, but I think I agree with Nargles- you might want to add ...