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I'm questioning your line breaks on this one, Bradshaws, and the ending could be stronger. However, yes, good imagery. And the play on 'worm' was humorous :D Androgenderously Yours, ~Ed

Listen to Claw and Colly. I do, and I'm a better poet for it. I just thought I'd add this: Results 1 - 10 of about 153,000 for "Life is ...

Alright, I'll say it right now; I'm generally averse to archaic poems. And even beyond that though, this seemed forced. For instance, I'm certain you misused 'suffice' here: "Just one ...

[s]wat[/s]. What. W H at. That's just one word. It's "to" not "2" and 'cause or 'because' not "cuz". Show some semblance of professionalism. If you don't care about your ...

Where to start.... Emotional Poetry Punctuation . Well then... I'd try writing in a way that lets readers relate to the characters or situations; that way, they'll actually care what's ...

First off; don't post so many pieces in one section at once. It deters people from reading. Second off, I can't even get through this as it's riddled with basic ...

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I think you should take the idea behind this, and cerate a totally new piece. Your rhymes are hazy, inconsistent, and forced to the point beyond saving. The 'transitions' are ...

"truckers" should be either "trucker's" or "truckers'", depending on what you meant. [//grammar-naziism] This sounds like something my friend Matt would write. Overall, simplistic. It wasn't emotional

I haven't read through others' posts, so forgive me if I repeat. But are you serious?!?! You can't compare the two. JK is an excellent author, while Paolini uses rehashed ...

First off-- Listen to Scribe, he's right. All I'm gonna do is correct your mythology. Zeus was the lord of the Heavens, the Earth was considered mutual territory between him, ...

I'll only make one specific comment, and that is to your use of ' COINCIDENCE ' Don't resort to gimmicks in poetry. Use the power of your words to express ...

Okay, this is my first attempt at poetry, so please be gentle with me. I'm definitely open to lots of critiquing, since I know... basically nothing about writing poems. First ...

Chapter 1 Christian raised his eyebrows at me and studied his watch. “You’re late.” “Oh, shut up.” I brushed my hair back and looked over at him. He was leaning ...

i could've sworn I already critiqued this... Hmmmm... Anyways, I haven't read the other people's reviews, so bear with me and the potential repetitiveness. You need to come up with ...