Forensic Love

by Chandni

Published August 2, 2007

In Old Poetry

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Well well well, as if I expected any better :)

I like the imaginary and the descriptions created with lovely adjectives. I hate the way I can't say much about it hehe and how this isn't being useful at all. Ah one thing though, it could look better parted it stanza's ;)

Cheerios, Chandni

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Snoink
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Snoink commented Comment · Aug 3, 2007

In the beginning, the line breaks do seem a little forced, but halfway through, they start to make sense.

I'm just wondering: wouldn't it be better with the last word gone?

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whence wrote a review Review · Aug 3, 2007

I'm questioning your line breaks on this one, Bradshaws, and the ending could be stronger.

However, yes, good imagery. And the play on 'worm' was humorous :D

Androgenderously Yours,
~Ed



Doors are for people with no imagination.
— Skulduggery Pleasant