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Re: Murder
The best thing about this poem was definitely your use of symbolism and personification. A little different at the end, and I suspect there's a deeper meaning here, but nevertheless ...
Jun 10, 2015 -
Re: Why be the best?
WELCOME TO YWS!!! I think you're getting the idea of what poetry is all about. The only issue here is conventions. You capitalize words that aren't necessary and space things ...
Jun 10, 2015 -
Re: belly up
I absolutely love the structure of this poem!! I'm critiqued often on my poem structured like this, but it's so symbolic! I thin it's an important part of the art. ...
Jun 10, 2015 -
Re: Soiling Stigma
I absolutely love studying and researching mind disorders like manic depressive disorder. Alongside with writing it's my #1 choice career at the moment. I love what you've done here. and ...
Jun 9, 2015 -
Re: Algebra and Mystery Meat
I do appreciate this comical twist on what a teacher might think. You did a good job of using aspects we as students might not imagine and you used different ...
Jun 9, 2015 -
Re: The Dance
I don't find this very cheesy at all...love does what it does, and sometimes cliches are what comes out of us because of it. That being said, you've found a ...
Jun 9, 2015 -
Re: Autumn Days
Love the rhyme, rhythm, and structure of this poem! I have to say it has a FEW cliches that are often found in poetry...but they're not overused and you balance ...
Jun 9, 2015 -
Re: when you cant understand the word omnipresent
Very raw and thought-provoking. A good poem makes you read twice! Some people might find this too difficult to understand and accuse you of stringing together random phrases, but I ...
Jun 9, 2015 -
Re: Aidel, my little brother.
Hello there! Welcome to YWS!!! I haven't read any of these reviews (I know, I'm horrible...) so I apologize if I repeat what's already been said. I'm just gonna dive ...
Jun 9, 2015 -
Re: She wanted freedom
So I think the other reviewers here covered the majority of issues in the poem. I want to talk about something other than the content: the title. I'm a big ...
Jun 3, 2015 -
Re: Seeing it Right......
@SnazzyPencil is right...this is plagiarism of the poem Colorblind just written recently... YWS is a place to write original work. If you like the poem, maybe write a response or ...
Jun 3, 2015 -
Re: Locked
WELCOME TO YWS!!! I. Love. Poetry. I write it often, and let me say I appreciate a powerful poem that gets its point across in a way like this. Poetry ...
May 25, 2015 -
Re: Wool of the Prince-- Epilogue
Okay I felt the need to say this quick-- I haven't really read this series but now that I see it's finished I am so proud and in awe! I ...
May 25, 2015 -
Re: That So Called Friends
hello there:) I think this poem would actually make a great rap. Maybe you should fine-tune stuff and make it a song. That'd be cool. So things I like: it's ...
May 25, 2015 -
Re: Writer’s Curse
the structure of this poem looks nice, as is the rhyming scheme and rhythm. the one thing I'm not too keen on is the 'generic-ness' of this poem. it's beautifully ...
May 5, 2015
