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  • Poetry » Other, Supernatural Re: Murder

    The best thing about this poem was definitely your use of symbolism and personification. A little different at the end, and I suspect there's a deeper meaning here, but nevertheless ...

    Jun 10, 2015
  • Poetry » Realistic, Spiritual Re: Why be the best?

    WELCOME TO YWS!!! I think you're getting the idea of what poetry is all about. The only issue here is conventions. You capitalize words that aren't necessary and space things ...

    Jun 10, 2015
  • Poetry » Dramatic, Realistic Re: belly up

    I absolutely love the structure of this poem!! I'm critiqued often on my poem structured like this, but it's so symbolic! I thin it's an important part of the art. ...

    Jun 10, 2015
  • Poetry » Dramatic, Health Re: Soiling Stigma

    I absolutely love studying and researching mind disorders like manic depressive disorder. Alongside with writing it's my #1 choice career at the moment. I love what you've done here. and ...

    Jun 9, 2015
  • Poetry » Humor, Satire Re: Algebra and Mystery Meat

    I do appreciate this comical twist on what a teacher might think. You did a good job of using aspects we as students might not imagine and you used different ...

    Jun 9, 2015
  • Poetry » Dramatic, General Re: The Dance

    I don't find this very cheesy at all...love does what it does, and sometimes cliches are what comes out of us because of it. That being said, you've found a ...

    Jun 9, 2015
  • Poetry » Realistic, Narrative Re: Autumn Days

    Love the rhyme, rhythm, and structure of this poem! I have to say it has a FEW cliches that are often found in poetry...but they're not overused and you balance ...

    Jun 9, 2015
  • Poetry » General, General Re: when you cant understand the word omnipresent

    Very raw and thought-provoking. A good poem makes you read twice! Some people might find this too difficult to understand and accuse you of stringing together random phrases, but I ...

    Jun 9, 2015
  • Poetry » General, General Re: Aidel, my little brother.

    Hello there! Welcome to YWS!!! I haven't read any of these reviews (I know, I'm horrible...) so I apologize if I repeat what's already been said. I'm just gonna dive ...

    Jun 9, 2015
  • Poetry » Other, Satire Re: She wanted freedom

    So I think the other reviewers here covered the majority of issues in the poem. I want to talk about something other than the content: the title. I'm a big ...

    Jun 3, 2015
  • Poetry » Lyrical, Realistic Re: Seeing it Right......

    @SnazzyPencil is right...this is plagiarism of the poem Colorblind just written recently... YWS is a place to write original work. If you like the poem, maybe write a response or ...

    Jun 3, 2015
  • Poetry » Romantic, Lyrical Re: Locked

    WELCOME TO YWS!!! I. Love. Poetry. I write it often, and let me say I appreciate a powerful poem that gets its point across in a way like this. Poetry ...

    May 25, 2015
  • Novel / Chapter » General, General Re: Wool of the Prince-- Epilogue

    Okay I felt the need to say this quick-- I haven't really read this series but now that I see it's finished I am so proud and in awe! I ...

    May 25, 2015
  • Poetry » Literature, Teen Fiction Re: That So Called Friends

    hello there:) I think this poem would actually make a great rap. Maybe you should fine-tune stuff and make it a song. That'd be cool. So things I like: it's ...

    May 25, 2015
  • Poetry » Lyrical, Dramatic Re: Writer’s Curse

    the structure of this poem looks nice, as is the rhyming scheme and rhythm. the one thing I'm not too keen on is the 'generic-ness' of this poem. it's beautifully ...

    May 5, 2015


When a good man is hurt, all who would be called good must suffer with him.
— Euripides