This was actually really interesting. I liked it.
The rhyming attempts at the beginning were awkward. I say get rid of them.
This was a unique view point about the stigma. I haven't seen much of it elsewhere.
I like the image of the berries and the quotations.
There were a couple of small mistakes (I'm not even sure if they were mistakes) like forgetting to have constant capitalization or non-capitalization, and forgetting to put spaces in words like "goandthe" and "togoout."
I'm sorry this review couldn't be more helpful, but I liked the meaning and the sounds of the words.
Keep writing! Let me know if you have any questions!
~fortis
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