That So Called Friends

Hey good poem!

I really like the style of you poem and how you did your rhyme scheme, it really flows and is easy to understand.

Because seriously, just end this now I hope you get it by now

Just stop this now, please.

Hi Dear ILoveBooks!!

This is Eros here!!

I read your beautiful poety " That So Called Friend". It was a beautiful poem with a whole meaning. The Idea is very beautiful and it reminded me of a Drama Written by Shakespeare "Julious Ceaser" in which a so called true friend of Ceasor the dicatator, named Brutus, Stabs and murders him cold - bloodedly. The poem is expressed beautifully. I loved the style of writing. The language is easy to understand. It is all about the betrayance of your true friend. He cheated you in some way and you wanted him to know how bad you feel on being decieved by your own people. This idea is self explained by the last line of your poem

" I want you to know how much you make me sick ".

I loved the main theme around which your poem revolves.

Keep writing and we will keep reading and loving and reviewing them!!

First, this was a great poem. Its so sad that a lot of people experience friends that aren't really friends. This is a poem that a lot of people can relate to.

Secondly, the ending was good don't get me wrong but maybe you could have ended a different way.

"I want you to know how much you make me sick"

This is good but it seemed so dry like more could have been added
But other than that this is one good poem!

this poem is a goodone and hols the current age of freindship which is no longer based on the ground of trust but on shelfish needs. Truly when this is a siuation then freinship is need to end.freinds should give a ahoulder to cry upon if you dont get that then the freinship is useless. when u r breaking the freindship then he or she deserves to be tonned like a brick the time has come to break all bonds with the so called freinds

Hello ILoveBooks123,

EccentricRose is here to review! I'm horrible at finding mistakes in poetry, but I'll still give you my thoughts on the poem to the best of my ability.

I really like this poem. To be honest my favorite two line are these:

"You make me look like a fool

Then suddenly use me as a tool"

Yep, the very beginning! Too many times have I seen people who do exactly what you wrote about. It attracted my attention and I thought it rhymed nicely.


All in all, this poem was awesome. Great work!

~Rose

Hello there I Love Books 123! CelticThunder1438 here to review some of your work.

First off I have to say that this poem was really good. I liked it and loved how you had good rhythm! A lot of poems written nowadays, don't have that same amount of flowing... if you know what I mean. Its rare to see anyways, yours was really good and I enjoyed it! Good job with that.
There were a couple times where you didn't put commas where they were supposed to and stuff, but nothing to major.

One thing I saw was when you said - 'But I think this friendship need to end' I think it was supposed to be -"But I think this friendship needs to end" . That sounds better anyways, makes a little more sense =)

Also when you said - "Because seriously, just end this now

I hope you get it by now"

I found it a little weird when your said the same rhyme...

Anyways that's all I have, seeya!

~Selina

Hello there I Love Books 123! CelticThunder1438 here to review some of your work.

First off I have to say that this poem was really good. I liked it and loved how you had good rhythm! A lot of poems written nowadays, don't have that same amount of flowing... if you know what I mean. Its rare to see anyways, yours was really good and I enjoyed it! Good job with that.
There were a couple times where you didn't put commas where they were supposed to and stuff, but nothing to major.

One thing I saw was when you said - 'But I think this friendship need to end' I think it was supposed to be -"But I think this friendship needs to end" . That sounds better anyways, makes a little more sense =)

Also when you said - "Because seriously, just end this now

I hope you get it by now"

I found it a little weird when your said the same rhyme...

Anyways that's all I have, seeya!

~Selina

hello there:)
I think this poem would actually make a great rap. Maybe you should fine-tune stuff and make it a song. That'd be cool.

So things I like: it's relatable to a lot of people. I also think it's a great ending you've got here. Pretty powerful and striking, leaving us in thought.

Grammar stuff:
It's easier for the reader to understand if you place a hyphen between 'so' and 'called' in your title:
"That So-Called Friend"

But I think this friendship need to end
changed to:
"But I think this friendship needs to end"

Everyone keep saying you are fake,
changed to:
"Everyone keeps saying you're fake"
(I'm contracting 'you are' because it sounds better since the rest of the poem is quite casual)

With my heart start to race
I'm not sure what you're trying to say here...
"When my heart starts to race" ?

I don't get how much you get this low
Again I'm not sure how to interpret this.
"I don't get how you get this low" ?

I hope this hit you like a tons of brick
to:
"I hope this hit you like a ton of bricks"

This isn't the style of poetry I normally review so I hope this was okay.
Keep it up!

~iron.n

Okay, so this is a poem I would read after a friend and I get in a fight and I just can't take it anymore, at least that is the vibe I'm getting from this poem. I do like te idea of it and I love how the topic is relatable to almost anyone. So, I'm just gonna talk about this poem for awhile, if you dot mind.

So, first off, I live the concept. Like I said before it is sooo relatable and almost anyone can understand it. I will say that that something that usually attracts people to the piece is the title. I got the idea of your title, it's just that there was an error. I tink you meant it to be 'That So Called Friend, rather than 'That So Called Friends'.

I love the rhyming throughout the piece it adds a little extra spice to it. Although l think that the rhyming could be more constant and in a better rhythm. My suggestion would be to read the piece outlays and ask yourself, "does this sound right?"

Another thing that I would say look at is the plural vs. singular concept. I think that if you read it through slowly and steadily you will see what I am talking about.

All in all, it is a great poem with a lot of potential. If you feel like my suggestions are stupid and don't want to to do them then do nt feel obligated to use them, they are merely suggestions. So yeah... That's all I got .

Keep writing bro.

~#41