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@SnazzyPencil is right...this is plagiarism of the poem Colorblind just written recently...
YWS is a place to write original work. If you like the poem, maybe write a response or relating piece instead of copying. There's tons of people here who would be willing to give feedback on creating your own writing and poetry if you want.
Errr....Uh...
Colorblind
It's kind of already my poem...
Oh well, hi. Welcome to YWS. I hope you are having a great time here. Well, I am here for a review; so let's start reviewing this poem real quick.
Firstly, the way you structured your poem really well suited it. Good job with that.
I would now nitpick some of the mini errors up there. Realizing that you choose to use punctuation, I would nitpick on that too.
You need a comma after the word 'then' and before 'they'.
Umm... no! "Would OF" just doesn't sort of make any sense. It should look much much better without the 'of' though.
What do you mean? Do you mean the men slowly could see the others or the men were slow? A comma placement seems to be wrong.
A semicolon, instead of the period after 'red', should seem better.
'There're (there are) other colors to see' Makes sense?
I believe, 'realizing' is the key, right? People could see far back then too, they just never realized. Just my two cents!
Why's the 'y' there? A typo, I suppose.
Anyway, the flow and structure of the poem was good. Although it wasn't super awesome, it still remained really good and not 'boring'.
As I saw, you were trying to tell us, the readers, that people couldn't really realize/see the true colors the nature has offered us. Not a lot of people really care though, including me, so it was a good reminder to think that colors are really super important and life is sort of dull without them.
Anyway, good job with this one. I hope to read more of your poems soon. Keep writing and good luck.