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haha it's okay, my thanks :) posted like 9 times for some reason...haha and thanks!

thanks guys! I'll work on it! I seem to be better at putting emotion in sadder/darker potery for some reason. Oh well :)

Thanks so much! And yes, the girl comitted suicide to be with the guy. I'm glad you liked it so much! :)

wow! this is really deep and mysterious. I liked it a lot. You were very descriptive and I felt the emotion radiating from this. I have no complaints. Keep writing!

I really enjoyed this. It was a bold format, and you pulled it off nicely. You might want ot go back and change some things ot make it flow better, ...

I love the young, playful vibe that comes from this. It could've had a better rhythm, but I liked the simple way it was written. Good job, keep writing!

thanks!

thanks! I'll work on it, I haven't done any editing yet, thanks for the tips though! :)

thanks!

This is good, I liked the message it gave. good job!

thanks so much! :)

Harsh? This was amazing! I can't believe this is your first attempt! Really well done, I enjoyed this a lot! Great job!

Wow...this was really powerful. I can feel the girls' pain and how she's fading into noneistance. Well done!

This is good! I have a lot of freckles, and I thought this was really pretty, and cute too! You did well, and it doesn't emphasize the freckles too much, ...

I liked this a lot! just go back and edit a bit. Nicely done!