silented1

Rooting your tender feet doesn't make enough sense to me, it is like someone is standing for their balance and stability but it doesn't make sense for it to go, ...

fragile feathers— at the mercy of a gust of breath or wind for a fleeting chance at life This is greatness. Love it. vulnerable to the same natural outbursts You ...

It's hard to imagine Dreams and fear being made physical as an island to be plain and boring. Perhaps you've created multiple poems in one? By that I mean, you ...

I see in your beginning three lines that you are trying to set up an image, and you're doing well for a basic job, but be more descriptive and try ...

Hi, this is a poem. I say that because I don't have any nice opening lines. Anyways to the review. I find nothing in this poem relating to a book, ...

When the moon is bright They howl with might They bite and they fight! At midnight. When the hour is near They smirk and they leer There's so much to ...

I like the concept it's pretty cool, but you're lacking imagery and that would give these two things real contrast. You need to show them how they would affect the ...

Okay, so after reading the first stanza, I get all this "tool" phrasing, I call it tool phrasing because it has to be used by your images and imagery to ...

You got it going, I agree with snoink on the imagery and ideas of this poem are good, great really. But what I do not like is the lack of ...

This is kinda boring. There's no message really, besides one we would want to tack on ourselves, there's nothing to think of, to enjoy, to relate to- other than the ...

The only thing I can say to your edited version is that the imagery doesn't reflect what I think you're talking about. The love you share with this person. The ...

And you can drink the dead sea. -line removed due to laziness- That salt is your sin? I like this. It's an interesting idea and a bit more tangable than ...

Here I sit as your last breath has been taken. Gone are the days filled with joy, Gone are the days when you would console me, when we were both ...

Your grammar is interesting or stupid. I am going to say interesting (while it is stupid). I am interested as to why you used their instead of there. I am ...

What I don't like is all the questions, they were rob this piece of it's emotion. I mean, just saying I am this, would you this or that? It works ...