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Re: Val: 7
I love this just as much as I have loved every other chapter. I find myself cheering for "Quinn" and "Val" to get together, and I just love this so ...
Jan 27, 2017 -
Re: Our story- How we became
I felt this was more of a rant than an actual piece of writing, like you needed an outlet to just explode your feelings onto, and for that it was ...
Jan 24, 2017 -
Re: The Most Complex Poem
I actually really like this. I can see this being in poetry book in the middle or something. It gives me a clue onto the type of person you are, ...
Jan 24, 2017 -
Re: it felt good
I really don't have anything bad to say about this. This was a very real, very compact version of self harm. It was clear and concise and yet manic and ...
Jan 24, 2017 -
Re: "You're so skinny"
I read your title and thought this was going in a completely different direction. I applaud you for taking this side we don't talk about often and, well, talking about ...
Jan 11, 2017 -
Re: Dear mum........
This feels like a rant. I feel like it should be in the middle of a novel when the anti-hero is writing a letter only to throw it into the ...
Jan 11, 2017 -
Re: Character (A haiku)
Hm. This is leaving me pondering. Because while you are a very talented writer and this poem is good, I'm not sure if i like it. And that's not supposed ...
Jan 3, 2017 -
Re: Val: 1
AHHHHH. Okay I love this! I love this so much! As a complete and utter nerd on so many levels, I actually identify with this a lot, and makes the ...
Jan 3, 2017 -
Re: Val: Precursor
Wow. This is really good, although I feel like I don't know any of the characters. This is the first thing I've read by you, and you did write "prologue" ...
Jan 2, 2017 -
Re: Golden Fractures
Woah. Wow. Okay so I like this a lot. I love all of the imagery and how it twists from beauty-- "Midas without the curse" to "But the drops stung." ...
Jan 1, 2017 -
Re: That night
Wow, this is.... dark. Twas not expecting that, to be honest. I like it, but it seems a little choppy. Maybe try varying up sentence lengths a little bit? Like ...
Jan 1, 2017 -
Re: Sacrifice
I for sure understand what's happening. I think this would be a really great prologue, or epilogue if you played your cards right. Maybe even a rising action? I don't ...
Jan 1, 2017
