Young Writers Society

I was about to ask if this was an oxymoron but I saw that this was already answered. On another note, I like this. In all true honesty Life is complex and just saying that simple little world could be so very vague but explain an entire library of words to someone. I like how you made it an oxymoron, I really enjoy oxymoron poetry and using life as an example is a very nice one.

I'm not sure what angle you're going with this poem... it's so short, it's hard to tell, quite honestly! Still, it seems kind of like you're being darkly sarcastic, which gives it a quite humorous (in a dark way) and non-serious tilt, especially when you juxtapose the long title with it. I'm not sure that sort of effect was intended though, especially given your comments! Anyway, just something to look out for.

So short, yet able to completely state the thought. I liked how you have used the title of the poem.

I actually really like this. I can see this being in poetry book in the middle or something. It gives me a clue onto the type of person you are, and that makes me very very happy. I like knowing my authors.
Anyways my only suggestion is that you have something like:
Life

and

*something also complex as heck*

I just think it would be cool because then it's a compound poem/sentence thing and also it becomes "the most complex" because all of a sudden there's TWO large issues sitting on the page.
But I thought this was really good and powerful the way it was, so either way I think, go for it.

Hello, and welcome to YWS! I hope you enjoy it here! So I have reviewed maybe one or two pieces like this, and although I am not too good at it, I'll try my best!

The content isn't much, but it's good enough. I say "good enough" because I realize this is supposed to be funny, yet true at the same time (or at least that's what I got from it). You could've elaborated, but you didn't. Sometimes words can be powerful enough to stand alone, but it's hard for them to do that without other words to 'lean on'. (However, I do think that this is a really good idea that can be elaborated on.)

I think you could classify this as humor though. It's kind of like an oxymoron - the title suggests this might be an incredibly long, deep, and bursting with feelings piece, when in fact it is bursting with feelings, but in the simplest of ways.

Those things being said, the title is good, but I would like to see a more powerful word used in place of "complex". Of course, nothing is wrong with the title, but I think by substituting it in with another word like "intricate", you could "show more". When I think of complex, I think of a math problem, or something school related. When I think of intricate, I think of something elaborate, with twists and turns and unknown things. (And I equate life with the second word.) It's kind of like "mad", and "fuming". When I think of mad, I think of a schoolgirl who dropped her books, and is mad that she has to pick them up again. When I think of fuming, I think of a man who was just rear-ended, and his insurance won't cover the damage or something. Word choice is very important, even in a short, fun work like this.

Anyway, I wish I could have been more helpful with this review! Keep writing!

~Snazzy

beautiful imagery here. quite gorey, i might add. very dark.