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Anyway let's get right to it,
Just a typical old Friday night. Nothing new. Fully immersed in sleep, after a long shitty day. "Aaaaaaaaaaagh!!!!" The scream pierced my ears like a dagger, waking me up instantly. Annoyed, I attempt to go back to sleep, but after a few minutes, "Aaaaaaaaaaaagh!!!" For fuck sake. What's going on? I get out of bed,slightly concerned about what might be happening. I dress myself, grab a coat, get my shoes and walk downstairs to see what's going on. The screams keep coming back again.
I already start shivering as I open my front door, the cold piercing through my jacket, already proving the point to myselfthat I should go back inside. No one around, nothing but trees swinging from side to side in the night's breeze. Another scream. Louder than the ones before, I better hurry to help, but I hesitantly walk to towards the direction. Getting closer and closer to the screams, I see no one coming to help, no one peeking out of their windows, just emptiness in a cold night. I hear another loud scream.I start to pick up the pace.
Well this seems like a neat little start here. We've got a very much slasher horror style opening here with what seems like the buildup to a potential jump scare. It definitely does a pretty good job of dragging us readers in right here and quickly putting us in what appears to be a very solidly constructed scene here. There's just enough being revealed to get our attention without stifling any of the other aspects of this situation here.
I'm close. No more screams. I haven't heard any in around a minute. I approach the location of the scream. Just a set flats. As I approach I see a dark alleyway close to the flats. Heart beating fast, I'm starting to become afraid of what's to come. I probably should have stayed at home. I approach the alleyway. I gasp as I see a large pool of blood. Some of it soaking my shoes. A blonde woman, perhaps in her 30's, sprawled out in the pool, with lifeless eyes. It wasn't a pretty sight. My heart pumps even faster as I see a hoodied man, wielding a blood soaked knife, standing right over the blond woman's body. I probably don't have to tell you what my first instinct was. In an instant, I'm gone. I run as fast I can, speeding through the alleyway and set of houses, eager to get home as quick as I can. I look back and he's chasing me, blood soaked knife in hand. The fear is building up, I need to get away.
Hmm, this one builds on the earlier situation fairly nicely here although I do have to say its maybe detracting ever so slightly from the sense of fear that you build up earlier because we've got sort of the reveal of this killer happening in a way where we kind of have the protagonist spell it out for us rather than it being revealed on its own if you get what I mean. It is still going okay though, so let's see how this ends.
Still running for life, I'm close to home. My fear intensifies as I feel he's catching up to me. He manages to trip my leg. I try with all my effort to get up, but I scream with extreme pain as he stomps my thigh. I try to get up. I can't. The feeling of defeat already starts to crawl over me. He stands over me, with an intense look in his eyes. It's clear what his intentions are. There's no point trying to fight what's to come.
One. Two. Three. Four. I gasp in agony as his knife pierces through my back. Another one. And another. I'm losing the fight in me.
I look up at the sky to get one last look at the stars. Suddenly, the whole world turns to black.
That was slightly predictable there unfortunately although I suppose with a short story of this nature it is hard to imagine much else happening. It delivers on the ending well enough I think. That small issue in the middle does make this a little less powerful in terms of the build up there, but it still does work just about well enough.
Aaaaand that's it for this one.
As always remember to take what you think was helpful and forget the rest.
Stay Safe
Harry
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