piepiemann22

It's nice to see your work. In the thrird stanza is is "satrs" suposed to be stars? Other then that a very nice poem. Can't wait to see what else ...

I like it. I doesn't seem to have a deeper meaning, but it's clear that you put a lot of time into this.

I like it, but there isn't much meaning or feeling here. Looks like you just made a poem, but it is good.

Good, but short. Also, you should space out your paragraphs.

Thank you, that's a very good. That was what I was geting at.

I belive there is rhyme in the flow. You can't see it. You must read it and listen t it. Only then will you be able to know.

Thank you both. The reason I seemed to rush through this Chapter was for suspense. To make the read go on to find out more.

The past tense isn't something I'm going to do. The reason why is this story will take about 6 books to finish. The romance thing is a good point, but ...

I like it because it's about Star Wars, but it's not in poetry format

I think it's a good poem. Though your flow is a little off. Ani's right, rhyming may help, but it's not needed. Try reading other poetry to get the right ...

hashahahahaha. Its funny

It's a good poem but you line breaks feel like there off. It doesn't seem to flow smoothly. If you fix that you'll have a nice poem.

I think it's a good poem, but the breaks and puncuation are all wrong. The begginning was fine, but than it didn't make much sense. You need more puncuation in ...

I like it. It speaks of something true, from the heart.

okay, I'll keep that in mind.