woah, woah, arguing, halt!
It wasn't vague, but it wasn't concrete either.
I agree with phorcys, people start out vague, because it sounds pretty, but as you get farther in to poetry you realize its more than that, they are solid ideas and not just thoughts and fluttering description.
If you are writing an emotional poem (this one, for instance) rather than writing about the emotion, find the actual event that caused the emotion or an event, or even an object, that ties to the emotion and use that to be concrete. That way you aren't just talking about a feel or emotion, there is something else there for the reader to latch on to, and to feel and see.
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