Help those who are below us
Who's future is unsure,
Help those who plead for Justice
Go knocking on there door.
Help those who suffer violence
Homelessness and sin,
help those who don't believe
In strength that's hidden in.
Help those who have addiction
Don't know whats wrong from right,
Help those who cannot care less
And those out there to fight.
Help those who've lost their dignity
Through poverty ad dispair,
Help those who work from dusk to dawn
But we, who do not dare.
Help those who feel obliged
To take somebody's life,
Help those who's minds are evil
And put us through this strife.
Help all who want a good life
To get what they deserve,
To find their inner beauty
And to search in what they're served.
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I like your concept and your rhyming scheme although at some point it did not seem to rhyme f.e.
Unsure and door don't quite rhyme
Neither do deserve and served
Other than that, well you keep repeating "Help those" which gets a bit annoying here's a suggestion
There, those "help's" ar lessened now
As for the line I made bold, it doesn't qutie sound right, maybe
"those who don't recall,
their strength that's hidden in"
Cheerios, Chandni
I like it. It speaks of something true, from the heart.