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  • Poetry » Other, General Re: Winter's love.

    I had to read this a few times, both ways, to really be able to get it. Now I feel like crying. So I logged on especially to comment and ...

    Dec 15, 2011
  • Poetry » Dramatic, General Re: My Words are Silent

    Wow... I wasn't entirely certain what I thought about this piece until the finishing lines. The last line especially sort of tied the knot in my mind and made it ...

    Sep 30, 2011
  • Poetry » Other, General Re: What Have You Done, Helen of Troy?

    I LOVE THIS!!! I've never thought about it this way... It was really original! The rhyme scheme is perfect! It's such a cute little thing! Well done! It's not much ...

    Sep 22, 2011
  • Novel / Chapter » Fantasy, General Re: The Tower Girls: 1-The Lady in the Tower

    Alright, so I'm going to be of absolutely no use to you and just keep rambling on and on about how much I love this. I think, with all honestly, ...

    Sep 2, 2011
  • Poetry » Other, General Re: Sun and Sky

    I really like this! The first two lines were my favorite, because of the imageries. I even clicked like! The one thing that bugs me, is the ending. "Doing what ...

    Aug 29, 2011
  • Short Story » General, General Re: The Vegan Lion

    This was good! I felt a lot of things while reading this piece... In the end, though, I was somewhat... scared. I don't know why exactly - for some reason, ...

    Jul 18, 2011
  • Short Story » Romantic, General Re: She Knows Him

    I just wanted to tell you how much I love this. I love how you insert random bits - they are the best! Like the whole handstand thing. I love ...

    Jun 29, 2011
  • Poetry » Other, General Re: Smile (Contest Entry)

    I agree with theCodex about the "you can never be done" sounding a bit awkward, so you might want to consider changing that one - but other than that, I ...

    Jun 15, 2011
  • Poetry » Other, General Re: Booty Shorts

    Love it, love it, love it!!! It was so funny (and true)! Good job with this one. You definitely made a laugh out of something that's daily and\or annoying. I ...

    Jun 15, 2011
  • Poetry » Lyrical, General Re: Unknown Love

    I love this! It was so pure... I felt like I was looking at this poem, or maybe even the girl speaking, through clear and cold spring water - you ...

    Apr 24, 2011
  • Poetry » Other, General Re: The words are only rain.

    Beautiful! Very nice imagery! I admit, I didn't understand the italics at first, but then I read the first spoiler and re-read them - and it was breath taking. It ...

    Mar 30, 2011
  • Short Story » Romantic, General Re: Perfectly Flawed

    I love this! You did great!!! It's very hard to write about bullying, but you portrayed the emotions very clearly - you did very well there. I love your characters ...

    Mar 22, 2011
  • Short Story » Romantic, General Re: The sky was a dirty color of gray.

    Hi there! This exercise is harder than it looks, isn't it? Good job! I'm here to review :) My comments will be in red and the parts that I am ...

    Mar 3, 2011
  • Poetry » Other, General Re: ---

    I love this! The only thing I didn't like very much was the first four lines, they felt very familiar and cliche. They were intruiging, but something about them didn't ...

    Feb 3, 2011
  • Short Story » Fantasy, General Re: The Fish and His Roommate

    I just wanted to say that you used this writing style very well! The plot was very interesting and I had a very enjoyable read. You did good! I can't ...

    Jan 27, 2011


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— Isabel Quintero