Authors Note: Hey, I'm back!! Man, It's been a while since I've posted anything! I had to write this poem about Helen of Troy for a school project, but I wanted to post it on here before I turned it in. Please keep in mind that I'm very bad at poetry and this is only a ruff draft while reading this. I will warn you now, its not very good, but that’s why I'm posting it on here. Please leave a comment! Without feed back, I can't get better. Thanks!
What have you done, Helen of Troy?
Oh, Helen of Troy,
What have you done?
You abandoned your duty,
You decided to run.
You put matters of heart
Before matters of home,
You disobeyed your father,
You left him alone.
You had your people’s trust
in the palm of your hand,
Now you have lost it
To a boy from a foreign land.
You have started a war,
Over nothing at all,
You destroyed your country,
You caused it to fall.
Because of you,
The Greeks have won,
Oh, Helen of Troy,
What have you done?
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I LOVE THIS!!! I've never thought about it this way... It was really original! The rhyme scheme is perfect! It's such a cute little thing! Well done!
It's not much of a review, because there's nothing to fix! Just saying nicely done.
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So I really enjoyed reading your poem. It had a really cool idea and a very nice rhythm... until I hit this line.
I don't know how you'd change it if you would, but something that I can't quite place is wrong with the rhythm... Maybe one too many syllables or something? Anyways, I thought this was otherwise a very well-written poem, so congrats.
Really well donecepts were beautiful and very well said. I could see everything as I was reading it and everything made crystal clear and precise sense. Please, don't change a thing about this poem no matter what others review, because this poem is perfect the way it is. Nothing was wrong in the line of grammar, so overall, a very clean cut poem that I enjoyed reading(:
~Faith(: