Hi, I found this really interesting to read - quite controversial XD.. but interesting as a topic.
I feel like the way you've written this poem is quite rhythmic and I like the way you've used rhyme too - that kept it flowing.
I also like some of the light hearted humor added like "and it's been a while." or "burns my eyes" - that made me snigger a bit.
Furthermore, your use of rhetorical questions made the poem more personal to you - clearly showing off your opinion to the reader. So well done.
At the same time though I don't really agree with what you've written . I feel like if you don't want to wear "booty shorts" as you've called them then that's up to you. But I don't feel you should slate people that do - who's to say their motive is always boys? I agree sometimes, but ya know I'm a girl and I like to wear things that show off my figure because that's how I feel most confident. Not a personal attack on you- just saying .
So maybe I feel you could of shown a few of the positives/ arguments for wearing booty shorts but then sort of persuaded us as a reader why you disagree. Because with both arguments and both sides to the scenario I feel like it would've been more relatable as to where you are coming from - but that's just my opinion .
But ya know, I like how interesting this was and it was really intriguing to see your view point on it - I respect it but don't agree. I'd definitely love to read more of your poems if they were to involve opinions on certain topics because they way you write is really intriguing .
Hope I could help
-Lauren
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