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Re: Buyer's Remorse
I do love me a good free verse! This was excellent. I think you've really nailed the aspects of comedic poetry, which can be really tricky compared to more somber ...
Oct 13, 2017 -
Re: Daylight Clarity
I think this is really pretty, and I enjoy how unexpectedly it turns into something else. I was invested in this sort of dreamy pseudo-reality of the beginning, and it ...
Oct 13, 2017 -
Re: Bathroom Blues
This is a really beautiful poem that had an odd effect on me. The imagery of this piece, specifically the part where you describe the "cloyingly medicinal, right-up-your-nostrils scent" brings ...
Sep 21, 2017 -
Re: I Didn't Grow Wings
I LOVE this. It's short, sweet, and to the point, and at the same time it conveys such a strong message. On top of that, the structure is beautiful. I ...
Mar 26, 2016 -
Re: Screaming Whispers In A Silent Riot
This is a good start, and I am the first to admit that I love something saturated in metaphors, but I did have a couple of issues with it. To ...
Mar 26, 2016 -
Re: Your problems are fake; destroy yourself.
I really like this piece. I think it's really well written and really well thought through. I think that the inferred comparison between the dryness of California and the dryness ...
Mar 23, 2016 -
Re: A Work In Progress - (Screenplay)
I'm a former drama kid, and I have read a lot of screenplays, and I have just been waiting for one to come along so that I could review it. ...
Feb 19, 2016 -
Re: Equal Rights for Chimpanzees
I think this is an interesting piece, but I'm torn on it. Coming from a performance and competitive speaking background, the only thing wrong with this piece is that it ...
Feb 18, 2016 -
Re: Starchild - Chapter Two
I am still a fan of this story, and I still think that it has a lot of potential in it, but this chapter had me just a little bit ...
Feb 16, 2016 -
Re: Starchild - Chapter One
This took my breath away. I'm honestly so excited for any future chapters. This was a really good twist on a story about aliens (which I am always a fan ...
Feb 15, 2016 -
Re: Continuum
This is a really great piece. I think that it flows really nicely and I think that the imagery is really amazing. However, I do have to agree with others ...
Feb 12, 2016 -
Re: To trust a woodland eye - part 1
This might be me knit picking, but it bothered me, so I was going to let you know about it. There are at least two places that I counted where ...
Feb 12, 2016 -
Re: Shakespearean Sonnets: The Abyss
I love this! However, if you're writing for high school, I would not submit this as part of a competition, or at all. This is really dark, which I think ...
Feb 11, 2016 -
Re: Mr. Timetraveler - Chapter 1
This is really interesting and I'm excited to read more. I think that's it's a really original idea and that it has the opportunity to turn into something really cool. ...
Feb 11, 2016 -
Re: Broken Glass (Chapter 1)
I really liked this! It was really good and, for the most part, really well written. If I could give you any advice, it would be just to simplify it. ...
Feb 10, 2016
