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This is a good one. It is short, but very clear, understandable, and as others have also said, relatable. You did a great job by using the words "worry", "fret", ...

Hi, I enjoyed reading this. Great wording with the description of self-discovery, and with realizing what you are afraid of. (And I like the picture, too) :) You have also ...

Ahahahaha that was hilarious!!! :D Not only the ending but also the part when he says "how very observational of you". I loved your drawings as well. Detailed enough to ...

This is a very good song. Well written, simple, yet vivid with so much imagery, especially when you are describing colors :) Grammar is good. Spelling is also good. Just ...

Wow, I love poems, this is just another amazing one. Your feelings of affection towards the guy is very clear with vivid images. Also good imagery when you are describing ...

Great piece! And true story! I love Young Writers Society here myself as well. I was looking for a place to share my writing, too and voila, I saw YWS, ...

Hello Defyingravity01, The only word I would like to say for this poem is: WOW! This is just awesome. It is, in fact, one of the best poems I have ...

Hey ccwritingrainbow, Wow, this is pretty short but amazing!! In only five lines, you have successfully revealed your feelings about that special person. I would like to say this could ...

This piece is, although short, very good. You have done an amazing job giving a lot of meaning to only five lines. However, in order to not leave the reader ...

Wow, I have to say that I am really impressed. The plot is absolutely amazing. I got really emotional when I was reading it. Your use of figurative language and ...

Hi there, For this work of literature, I would like to say that I like the way you used poetic devices effectively, such as rhyming and imagery. However, I do ...

Hi antoniaa Welcome to young voices. My first piece here was also about someone special in my life, so I actually feel really connected to this piece. You are doing ...

Woww, this poem is amazing. You use a lot of emotional phrases really effectively. Also, very good job contrasting your feelings about your dad at different ages. I think that ...

Hi, this poem is really good. As mentioned previously, short, clear but important point you are making. Also, I notice that this is a 5-7-5 haiku :) I am terrible ...

Hi, mb1221 is here to review this piece. You have made a good start for your novel. These first few paragraphs are so catchy, so congratulations on that. The only ...