lyssiekins

Hi Catnip. I just wanted to say that the first second and third stanza were amazing. Nothing makes for good poetry like comparing two opposing ideas and then balancing them ...

Hey Catnip. You have beautiful poetry. This is the first poem of yours I've read and I all ready feel encapsulated by your choice of theme, by the very first ...

Well first of all thank you for teaching me the word bower. Definitely had to look that one up. I love the rhythm, especially the second stanza. It was perfect. ...

This whole poem is remnant of a drug trip. Or some kind of escape, addiction. There are a few spelling errors, and parts that don't make grammatical sense. I shall ...

this poem is interesting, a little hard to follow what with the random capitalization, "they're all lies" is the proper grammar, not "there". The ending was good, very strong until ...

A pretty flower laced with the light of gold whispering the secrets of the old ---- the secrets of old... if you say the old it sounds like theres something ...

It is surprising how scientists can be so self-righteous in bringing information forward, yet so obtuse when it comes to seeing what is right in front of their eyes. Why ...

Chocolate By:Angel Of God .a peom - I think you mean Poem ;) I really like this for its entertainment value, it was a little hard to process and follow ...

It was a lot of dialogue, seemed a bit forced. I could use some more descriptive like at the beginning. "The hot sun burning into my skin, like it was ...

A beautiful poem about being stifled by your surroundings, trying to find yourself by changing them. The third stanza is a little long. In poems with this much descriptive imagery ...

The rhythm is a bit off in my mind. Perhaps it would be better There is nothing left to say You took all my pain away I want you with ...

So torn between criticizing your literary work, and your habits! Ha ha. I do agree with a lot of what you are saying, drugs are an extension of the hormones ...

Just a spelling error here, : professional, If I were not so funny, nobody would laugh until they cried, - this line with the double negatives I don't enjoy, try ...

Hey there, beautiful poem. Very fantastic. I very few critiques for this poem, except that I think it would benefit from some complete stops -> . instead of constantly commas. ...

Hey :) I do like poetry about the ocean. One thing that bothers me is the constant commas, it has a feel of one big long sentence which makes it ...