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Addiction

by Pom


 
Addiction
 
 
There's nothing left to say

You took my pain away

I want you with me every day

Don’t leave me


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Tue May 21, 2013 2:36 pm
lyssiekins wrote a review...



The rhythm is a bit off in my mind. Perhaps it would be better

There is nothing left to say

You took all my pain away

I want you with me every day

Don't. Leave. Me.

Just some interesting punctuation. I like to play around with these. I really like the poem, short and sweet. The end of an addiction is always painful. You come to love feelings like people who give you feelings. When the source goes away, its heartbreak.





My tongue must tell the anger of my heart, or else my heart, concealing it, will break...
— Katherine, The Taming of the Shrew