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Re: Tekky tries to help an anemic.
Hi! This was really funny! Did you make it up yourself? Here are some things I would do to make it better: "Rick crossed his arms, “You spit it back ...
Aug 1, 2017 -
Re: False Mourners, Please Step Forward
Hi! wow... That is one very emotional poem. I think that the message you were trying to deliver to the reader was very clear. One thing that kind of confused ...
Aug 1, 2017 -
Re: Abused
HI! I'm about to give you a..... REVIEW!!! Anyways, I liked your poem because of the vivid detail and how each part sort of melded into the other. One thing ...
Aug 1, 2017 -
Re: Potions and Poisons (2/3)
HI! Your story had interesting themes, but those themes seem to clash too much, and make the story confusing. I think it'll be better if you focus on one point ...
Jul 30, 2017 -
Re: Dear Queer Girl in the Closet
I loved your poem! It was all over the place and I had basically no idea what was going on, but I could feel where you were going with it ...
Jul 1, 2017 -
Re: Sweet Nothing
Hi! I really loved your poem. But, since it's a review, I guess I'll give you a few suggestions. Firstly, I don't know what is going on, and my understanding ...
Jun 5, 2017 -
Re: Old Habit Part 2
Hi! I liked your story, but I had NO IDEA I would read that stuff. I like that you didn't go crazy with the "romantic parts" and you stuck to ...
May 29, 2017 -
Re: The Contemplative Duo
Hi! I liked your poem, but there's some things I would like to say since this is a review. To be completely honest, I kinda don't know what's going on. ...
May 26, 2017 -
Re: it's nearly done with
Really loved your poem! I really liked the second to last stanza. The rhyme and rhythm was very catchy there. But, in other parts or your poem, the rhythm was ...
May 22, 2017 -
Re: Thoughts
Hi! I loved your poem! There are a few things you could do to fix it though. Firstly, the first two lines are a bit confusing. It seems you forgot ...
May 16, 2017 -
Re: The First Sight
Hi! I loved your poem! Love at first sight has always intrigued me. One thing I would suggest, is maybe, in the second to last line, you say, "My heart ...
May 15, 2017 -
Re: Fool of Truth
I love how it rhymed! the rhythm was so catchy and the poem was short and sweet! I have basically no suggestions. One thing, the extra limerick at the end, ...
May 15, 2017 -
Re: carnelian dawn
I really loved your poem! It was so touching and the detail was amazing. You knew exactly where to accent your poem. One thing I would fix though, is the ...
May 15, 2017 -
Re: Flesh wounds or the girl who wouldn't die
Hi! I really loved your poem! It was kind of sad that your parents hit you so much. I love how you showed the reader how the character was still ...
May 15, 2017 -
Re: I love you, mom
Hi VegasLights! I loved your poem, it was so touching and heartwarming. I can relate to it so well. I have almost no suggestions for this review, but here's one. ...
May 14, 2017
