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I suggest you focus on one aspect of a Telephone and use it s a metaphor to a message you want to convey that has a universal appeal (meaning it ...

The material for this poem is good. Potential, I see. However, try to work out on how you express your message. In a poem, you don't tell people what you ...

I sense some potential in this poem. What I understand was the persona is under appreciated by someone important to him/her. The persona, in the brink of his/her life (maybe ...

I feel the intention of the poet: to be able to convey his/her sentiment towards life, a cry for help. I sense some potential and even the mood and pacing ...

The material that you are using in this poem is quite good. I love how you weave your topic making it universally appealing. However I have some issue about the ...

Yellow and orange paint the sky as the world around her darkens. She silently sits sipping tea, as she reflects over her life. She has always been graded well, and ...

Oh my! Thats was a heart battering reading excursion. That was a great challenge Psyche had imposed to cupid. I didn't imagine and expected that the story will go like ...

Hey everyone, this is just a peom I felt like writing the other day, needs edits! suggestions please? Dead Magic. Her nimble fingers weave magic The delicate creators of a ...

nice! To Be Friend and Foe BY Adrian I stand here waiting by the ocean’s edge. The salty breeze washes over my face. Sometimes, I wonder if anyone can hear ...

I really hate the large scale commas and words you made... hmm... I'm still working on a title for this poem so any suggestions would be great. I wrote it ...

Long before I breathe my last breath, I look forward for a fight. It always happens like this, I always lose and never win. Why is this ? Can this ...

I move as wind in the leaves rustlings no one hears but the trees Awaking only the cicadas who dare to hear Invisible as the air no one hears nor ...

I haven't submitted any poetry lately, but I figured I would submit this. I wrote it as something for an oral presentation. Tell me what you think about it. __________ ...

I forgive you not, Athena. For what you've done to me. An unbearable decay of skin and blood, a walking Gorgan corpse. Feared by all. It was not my fault, ...

My verse from a track off my EP. When we first me I knew it was magic, A year plus later, baby you still my habit, But now it's gettin' ...