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Hi DreamWork! I'm here to leave a review on your poem. This review would just be based on my opinions, so it's up to you if you consider it or ...

I was hooked by your title and made me want to read your article. "This is the Modernization Era, which brought an innovation around the globe in many aspects. Progression ...

“Living without technology is like living without air.” - Your hook is catchy and I agree with it. "It says that how people really need technology in order to survive ...

"We were just a plain people who don’t use innovative technologies." - This is a catchy one. In the introduction, I like the way how you related people and technology ...

You've got a good and catchy hook. "A quote from Daniel Bell which speaks about the significance of technology." - I think this sentence does not directly support the quote. ...

"Millions have survived without technology yet they are satisfied." - You may add an instance wherein people survived without a single use of technology. "Millions died without using such technology."

You've got a good hook. The question was addressed and was further explained in the succeeding sentences. Also, you may want to consider adding transitional devices to enhance the flow ...

Your first paragraph is good. The idea of using your own experience as part of the introduction is also good. You can add transitional devices to make your sentences coherent. ...

A question for the hook has always been okay because it lets the reader think in the first place, but you can also use other types of hooks to give ...

"Technologies' Progression, A Way to Development" - This is a catchy title which made me want to read your article. "Can you imagine a world without technology?" - Your hook ...

“One wrong move and you’ll die.” - This is a very nice hook, a powerful one. "Through technology’s efficiency, reliance and reliability and accessibility, all things can easily be manipulated ...

"According to Merisia (2010), home appliance really made to make life easier for everyone making it easier for us to spend as much time as possible with family and friends." ...

"I can't live without it." - Nice hook, it caught my attention immediately. "Technology has made many changes in our daily lives that it has become one of mankind's necessity." ...

"Why does brand matters?" - You can make it "Why does brand matter?" or "Why do brand matters?" "According to Lois Geller a brand is a specific combination of logo, ...

"One-third of married couples in the U.S met online." - This is a very powerful hook. I bet that only a few know this. You might also want to consider ...