One-third of married couples in the U.S met online (Cacioppone, 2013). It only proves that technology has made and will make further great impact on our lives. Technology continues to work its magic in improving human life making further advancements to the world and human society towards sustainable development for mankind. Humans develop new and efficient tools and machineries for functional and efficient work. The purpose of these products of technology is to lighten the work of people in order to have a convenient life. Technological advancements and developments can be seen in the fields such as in education, communication, and transportation.
Technology is a great tool in improving education. It presents various ways of advancing teaching efficiency such as the use of audio-visual presentations, projectors, and televisions which help the teachers to have the full attention of their students making them more focus on the subject while letting the teachers to have more time to interact with the students. “In these ways, the challenge of making the comprehension level among students at its highest is achievable.” (Pond, 2013) Technology also provides easy access to school’s facilities. Online viewing of grades can now be done. Enrollment can now be done online. Finding researches is made faster through the new systems introduced to the schools’ libraries. Students use their smartphones and tablets in browsing information because of its mobility, portability and ease of use. Therefore, advancements in technology does not only provides convenience but also enhancing students skills in today’s technical know-how enabling them to have the knowledge and a chance to be one of the future generation of leaders.
Technology establishes a network of people from anywhere in the world enriching relations through communication. Citizens are getting updated to the latest news and happenings around the globe through media reports featured on televisions. It brings you news as it happens. People can now buy things from other countries through online shopping. “Using the internet for retail has become so commonplace that for many, added benefits of convenience, easy research ability, and price comparison tools outweigh the effort required to physically visit the traditional bricks-and-mortar store.” (Handyside, 2012) technology brings people closer to the world. Anyone can freely send e-mails or contact their families and loved ones who are in other country through cellphones and computers. “Rather than sending individual notes, social networking provides a constant stream of updates and information. These computer tools have taken communication a step further than email due to their ability to instantly communicate life and status updates to an entire network of people who can respond and comment to such notes in real time.” (Victor, 2011) Therefore, technology serves as a channel to voice out individual ideas opinions, to be involved in the circulation, to interact to the world.
Technology aids in an organized and efficient work through having an easy way of transportation. It provides convenience in time management. Workers come in time to their working places by means of fast moving vehicles, therefore giving more time for longer hours of labor. “With sufficient supports in communication and machines, people can lessen their work hours at the same time optimize their work efficiency and effectiveness.”(Nefertete, 2010) Travelers can now move easily from one place to another anywhere in the world. Nowadays, aircrafts are available which can make your journey shorter from one country to another. “So, all transportation means invented with the support of technology really brings people easiness of traveling.” (Oska, 2008)
In summary, technology plays a very important role in education, communication and transportation. It serves as a tool in learning which helps for the betterment of education for children. Also, it establishes good interpersonal relationship among people in the world. Moreover, technology offers other modes of transportation and it was utilized for convenience. Technology provides great assistance, therefore improving the society as a whole even though there are some certain repercussions and negative impact of technology as well. The world became a better place to live in. Thanks to these advancements. A bright future awaits to the present generation of children.
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Your topic is very interesting. The content is excellent. Nice job. Keep it up.
I like your hook sentence, "One-third of married couples in the U.S met online (Cacioppone, 2013)." I didn't know that until I read your essay.

Another, I like the way you insert your citations and connect it with our own ideas.
I would prefer if you use more transitional devices in order to have a better flow of ideas.
Your conclusion really has everything that you put in your thesis statement.
Overall, excellent essay and very informative. Job Well Done!
Your essay makes sense. You proved that the advancement and improvement of technology make a lot of benefits to our daily lives and for the near future.
This article is so good and very impressive! Keep up the good work!
I love it. You've made an excellent essay. Job well done.
You explained it very well. The impact of technology in our lives were clearly stated and that plays great in achieving your goal of letting your readers know about it. Good Job!
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A very informative one!
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Great essay!
Your title is catchy. And so is your first sentence, which is also very interesting. You also have a good word choice. Your conclusion is good, but I guess you should combine the last two sentences, or maybe you just had a mistake of putting a period instead of a comma. You pointed out your details clearly, and your examples supported your ideas. Nice job! Keep up the good work
I like your introduction, and your points.

"Technology establishes a network of people from anywhere in the world enriching relations through communication." - I really like this sentence, this is my favorite sentence ..
You pointed it well, your ideas are nice,
overall I agree with your essay . .Good Job, keep it up ..
Very well said. Not bad. Thanks a lot.
Nice essay.
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nice one.
keep up the good work! 
Relevant use of quotations: Check
Organization of ideas: Check
Evident and positive! Great essay, dear!
This article is good! Keep Up the good work!
Nice one. I like your essay. Keep up the good work.
"One-third of married couples in the U.S met online." - This is a very powerful hook. I bet that only a few know this.
You might also want to consider adding more transitional devices to have a smoother flow of discussion.
"television" - (Second paragraph, second sentence) You can change it to something more modern.
"Online viewing of grades can now be done. Enrollment can now be done online." - You can combine these two sentences because it is somehow parallel to each other.
Good use of quotations in every part of your article is very evident.
Your article is so positive and I learned a lot from it. Keep up the good work!
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This was the best one I've seen on here yet. I haven't read all of the technology posts, yet but this one talked about something the others essays I read, didn't. You talked about transportation. I think for most part when someone hers the word technology, then they think computers, gaming systems and phones. But there is actually a lot more. Glad you explored that.
Also, Is aw no punctuation problems, and only one line, which another reviewers pointed out, that I found awkward. Good job overall.
Keep it up!
Great essay, A lot of information can be learned from this. Keep it up
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I really like the article! You did a wonderful job with many things throughout this, though I only pointed out a few. So here are a few things that I would like to point out. Of course, this is just my opinion. You, by no means, have to do these changes. You can keep it as it is if you see it fit.
Very interesting, I didn't know that!
Some reason, this sounds a little funny to me. It could be the words are in an awkward formation or what. You might need to look at that.
Maybe add a little flair to this topic sentence, it is interesting but for me it does not want to bring me in officially. You know what I mean?
Great job stating and using quotations here!
Maybe combine these two sentences into one? If not, it still works the way it is.
I believe the "T" in "technology" is supposed to be capitalized.
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Great job with your conclusion! You did very well with tying it back to your thesis statement! A thing I would add is the citations. I would always add citations anywhere when you are writing an article or essay. That way the audience or reader knows where you got your information and whether or not you are creditable. Also, maybe add a bit of pathos in your article. Adding a bit of emotion will pull the audience or reader closer to the essay. Though you did a wonderful job with logos and ethos. It won't hurt to add some, if not, you are still good either way! If you have any questions or reasons why I said something I did. Feel free to message me and we can chat about it! Can't wait to read some more from you soon! Thank you for your time,
~Onyx
Very well said. Organization of ideas have maintained. Keep up the good work.