"Technology like art, is a soaring exercise of the human imagination." A quote from Daniel Bell which speaks about the significance of technology. We live in a society which we depend on the capabilities of science and technology. It is amazing that technology changed the world now. Almost everyone believes that technology has made life easier and more comfortable and that it has enabled us to perform tasks that we could not do otherwise. Gadget, devices and also machines are just common examples of technology that contribute us in our everyday lives. Before, we are satisfied on the things we have. But now, with the help of intelligent people and through science, we made all things possible. In this case, technology is very helpful to the society in terms of communication, business, and education.
We are fun of sharing thoughts, spreading information, and sending messages. Communication is a way to interact with our friends and family. People before used letters for their messages to express their feelings and thoughts. It may take a long time and sometimes it doesn't work. That is the reason why people have an idea on how they can improve the said act. According to (Molinor, T. Graham 2003, January) technology has changed our lives by giving us freedoms. Different inventions and even applications emerged and help people communicate even they are far from each other. Distance maybe too long, but through modern technology it is just a space between people.
Technology have changed the pace and face of business. Every business in the world uses technology in order to help them accomplish their goals. In the field of business, the world revolutionized. In many societies, technology has helped develop more advance economies (Kay, 1998). Instead of putting so many files in a small drawer, we can just restore it on a computer. It makes work more efficient for producers and easier for the employees. Machines and other modern materials produces twice or even thrice products on what can a man do. The technological advances affects the aspects of working life. According to Byron Howard, Sr. (2011) that technology is an unmistakable economic and social force in our world for global communications, business exchanges, particularly through electronic commerce, and the simple tasks that make up our daily lives are all significantly influenced by technology.
Computers and internet have expanded the way education can be delivered to the learning of the students. Logue (2012) states that they can be tailored to individual students' needs, and thus achieve desired learning outcomes for each student better and faster. New technological devices are very crucial in education because they facilitate the teaching learning process and promote the quality of education. Everyone wants to know if the modern technology can make a difference the way teaching is currently to be done. For some students, it helps them to enlarge their knowledge for a certain topics and lessen the time they will spend in conducting research works. In additional, educators uses technology in preparing their lessons and be guided by some information. Technology gives color in a class discussion, for its new ideas and for students to explore more. Implementing technology in schools will somehow be good. But we also need to consider that we shouldn't rely all of these in technology.
Each product has its distinct uses which helps people to make things productive and innovative. Technology acts a big role in our time today. We depend on their credentials and ability for us to be satisfied. Every one of us benefits from technology in different kinds of aspects in our life. It performs a big purpose in this world today. I believe that it is very helpful for all of mankind and without it our lives will be more difficult. People should use the products sparingly, carefully, and properly because not all the times it will be helpful for us. It is also better to do our part too and remember that we also need to be responsible enough.
Mendoza, Shiela Marie V.
BS ECE-T1B
De La Salle Lipa
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keep up writing. you have a good future in writing
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excellent hook and a great essay
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You've got a good and catchy hook.
"A quote from Daniel Bell which speaks about the significance of technology." - I think this sentence does not directly support the quote. You may want to consider revising if you want because this, I think, is a fragment.
"We are fun of sharing thoughts, spreading information, and sending messages." - Do you mean fond?
"According to (Molinor, T. Graham 2003, January) technology has changed our lives by giving us freedoms." - You may check your citation.
"Distance maybe too long, but through modern technology it is just a space between people." - This is a good and very strong claim.
"Every one of us benefits from technology in different kinds of aspects in our life." - You may omit "kinds of" if you want.
Overall, you've got a good construction of your paragraphs. Without a doubt, you can be a good writer someday. Great job, keep up the good work!
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nice essay.
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Technology is really a exercise for human imagination, I agreed with it. Technology nowadays really help in our education.
Nice citation about technology and it is a very good essay.
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your hook,"Technology like art, is a soaring exercise of the human imagination." really catches my attention. It is also true when you say,"We live in a society which we depend on the capabilities of science and technology." Nice introductory part.
Also, it would be very helpful if you use deeper words that will make your essay more effective. Still, your article is very informative. Good Job!
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"Technology like art, is a soaring exercise of the human imagination." A nice and marvelous introductory quotation. It truly catches the attention of the readers. The essay is well done and it shows many advantages of technology in our lives. The citations are well-mentioned and it further improve your point that technology makes our life easier in different aspects of business, communication, and education. Keep it up. Great job
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"Technology like art, is a soaring exercise of the human imagination." nice quotation. i like your introduction about technology but there are some part that you need to improve
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I did not find any difficulty in understanding your work. I want to give a compliment for that. Your transition of ideas is well-systematized. Just be careful with your spelling and grammar because there are some errors in it. Be observant with your subject-verb agreement. Over-all, you did a good start in writing so keep it up.
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It looks like you forgot to include citations! You included parenthetical citations which are great, but don't forget to include a citation to the original work at the end.
In any case, I like how you end your essay with a balanced look at technology. You show that it can transform us and make many aspects of our lives easier, but you also rightly point out that it's not always helpful. However, you jump to this point without much of a transition. I'd like to see you expand more on it.
In all, I found your essay to be very easy to read and to follow. Your introduction does a good job of setting up the essay, and your conclusion not only summarizes the essay, but also offers a new thought, which is exactly what a conclusion is supposed to do. Good job.
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You have a point on your essay. Keep up the good work!
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nice essay. Keep it up
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I like your introduction, very well said !
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Nice essay huh. Keep up the good work.
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Nice essay.
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Hello! Knight Cailey here with a review. I assume this is an essay for school, and so I will search back through my essay writing knowledge to try and give you the most helpful review I can so that you can get a great grade on this.
So, I love your introductory quote. I think that is a great quote to start with, as it presents the side of the argument that you will be taking and it's a nice hook and just overall a great quote.
Your introduction is good, too, but I think you could present your thesis statement even more clearly after the quote. Try to avoid the general "people think" or "they believe" or "we use". It looks like this is a persuasive essay, which means you get to share what you believe. So make your viewpoint stronger. Start out with something like "I believe that technology is good because it helps us in the areas of communication, business, and education." There are two things that you need to cover in your introduction.
1. Your thesis: this is your point of view, the truism you are trying to argue. (Technology is helpful and good.)
2. A summary of your arguments: it's good to start out by listing the arguments you will be discussing. In your case- communication, business, education.
Your body is good, and you've certainly got evidence, which really helps you prove your point. You have a few mistakes here, or sentence that might flow better with an extra word or if worded differently, but I won't point those out right now so that I can get to some of the more important things.
I don't have much to say about the body of the essay, it was good and you did a really nice job of explaining your point of view and showing why you think the way you are writing.
And then your conclusion. Right before the conclusion you wrote: "But we also need to consider that we shouldn't rely all of these in technology." I would take out this line. This suggests a "yes, but..." in your essay, which you don't need. Stick to a firm "yes" and show all the reasons why technology is good. You don't need to explain that it isn't always good or that it isn't the only good thing. Just take that out and make your "yes" be an unquestionable yes.
Also, I would suggest ending with a summary of your three points again. In your conclusion, you should go back over the points you made about communication, business, and education, and if you can find a way to connect the conclusion back to the introduction that would be even better.
I hope this helps you a lot, and I wish you luck in your assignment. Feel free to ask me any questions at all, and I hope this all made sense.
Keep writing,
-Knight Cailey
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