“Technology”- it’s a simple word with a big meaning. Have you been aware of what technology really is while using it for so many years now? Have you realized how it affects so much in people’s lives may it be good or bad? Most probably, some knew about these but most of us may not fully understand of what technology really is. We can actually say that technology deals with the innovation or improvement of the ideas to create something better and new for the comfort of the people’s lives. It simply reflects on what we call “modernization”. Being in a modernized world not only gives you those negativities being given by technology but also helped the people in some great ways. In fact, it plays a vital role in our world because in almost everything we are doing in every minute of our lives, technological concepts were applied. When we focus on its positive sides, we can clearly view how it contributes for the betterment of our lives, particularly in our works at home, in the industry and even in medicinal field.
Home appliances and electronic devices are essential in everyone’s life since they are lending immense help for the survival of man.According to Merisia (2010), home appliance really made to make life easier for everyone making it easier for us to spend as much time as possible with family and friends.Apparently, all the domestic devices that can be seen in our living room, in the dining room, even in our bathrooms and in other corners of the house were all products of this continuing evolution of technology. For instance, electric stoves, washing machines, rice cookers and vacuum cleaners were generated in various uses to help man in coping with the things we need to fulfill day by day. According to Werner (2011), many people finds electronic gadgets and devices to be time-saving items that add convenience to their lives. Moreover, those electronic devices like cellular phones and laptops contributed a lot for men’s easy access to information and for communication purposes. These devices also made entertainment more accessible and efficient even we’re just at home. We don’t have to travel for hours and leave home for amusement intentions. Seemingly, because of our residence with the domestic appliances and electronic devices while at home, life was made better for the comfort of everyone.
Even the industry had been widely influenced and still continuing to use technology for more improvements. Really, factories are now using the modern technology to manufacture products to be sold out into the public through the machines which enabled automated processes for better works to be done. They even use it for online advertisements to promote the products that they are holding, and through technology, according to Thadani, global collaborations and partnerships are easier to start and maintain and this benefits everyone involved with international business. One more thing is that, as said by Leybovich (2010), new advances in communications technology, data analysis and smart infrastructure are enabling more businesses to streamline their transportation strategies through better trip-planning and improved resource allocation. Better transportation is now made easier and more attainable through the innovations on automobiles. In fact, cases of developing more inventions regarding this matter are increasing. Even in the roads and highways, advancements were being applied. Newly constructed infrastructures are great contributions for the people’s wonderful travel experience.
Medicine is another leading field being struck by modernization. According to Hendricks (2013), over the centuries, new medical developments and techniques have changed the face of healthcare. As he said, the medical field has always brought together the best and brightest of society to help those in need. Treatments for the diseases which seemed to be no cure at all were discovered and found that they actually have some. Brought by the advancement in technology, researchers have able to find out those hidden cure for some illnesses. In addition, synthetic medicines used to heal even minor wounds were fabricated in the laboratory through the use of modern apparatus and equipments. Hospitals and health centers possessed different machineries to help in the treatment of the people who needs it the most. What’s the truth is that, technology is really making a name in medicinal field.
Technology simply lives with us even in the simplest to greatest extents of our lives. It really makes the world go round. At home, appliances and electronic devices mirror how technology became vital in every man’s existence. It makes every work get done faster and easier. Influences of modernization are also keeping on touching the field of industry. Innovations in transportation and businesses were using technological concepts to develop better way of life. Another thing, medicinal field had been greatly influenced by the evolution of technology. It uses different modern ideas for new discoveries to be gained to support and maintain every man’s health. Remember that technology is an advantage for those wise people who used it in the right way it should be. So now, do you think you are wise as a user of technology?
References:
·Hendricks, D. (2013, May 14). How Technology Is Changing The Medical and Health Care Field. Retrieved August 28, 2013, from http://www.huffingtonpost.com/drew-hendricks/how-technology-is-changin_b_3273542.html
·Leybovich, I. (2010, July 15). Tech Advances Improving Transportation Efficiency. Retrieved August 28, 2013, from http://news.thomasnet.com/IMT/2010/07/15/technology-advances-improveing-transportation-efficiency/
·Merisia, V. (2010). The Benefits of Home Appliance. Retrieved August 28, 2013, from http://bombayfurnitur-e.com/home-appliance
·Ramey, K. (2012, November 6). Modern Technology Advantages and Disadvantages. Retrieved August 28, 2013, from http://www.useoftechnology.com/modern-technology-advantages-disadvantages/
·Thadani, R. (n.d.). Benefits of Technology: Business. Retrieved August 28, 2013, from http://minharoupasuaroupa.blogspot.com/2012/03/benefits-of-technology.html
·Werner, L. (2011, January 7). Electronic Devices Pros and Cons. Retrieved August 28, 2013, from http://goarticles.com/article/Electronic-Devices-Pros-and-Cons/3978951/
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Technology has played a big role in improving our lives. It keeps on improving day by day but we have also become addicted to it. Majority of people (including scholars) can't do without technology. So it has played a big role in our development but it has also reduced on our creativity and independence.
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Nice one ^^
it has a good hook.
Knight Dragon, here to review!
First off, welcome to YWS! Now for the review.
Technical:
"Have you realized how it affects so much in people’s lives may it be good or bad?" should be "...people's lives, be it good or bad?"
"Most probably, some knew..." should start either "Most likely" or "Probably", and then "knew" should be "know".
"...not only gives you those..." get rid of the "you" and replace it with "people".
"... but also helped the people in some...", "helped" should be "helps".
"...home appliance really made to make life easier for everyone making it easier..." is really wordy and awkward. "made to make" makes no sense.
"...in various uses to help man in coping with the things we need to fulfill day by day." You need to fix "in various uses." Also, this is a good example of wordiness, something your essay has had issues with up to this point. I feel like you're going for a word count instead of clarity. Try to condense your sentences a little.
"According to Werner (2011), many people finds...", your verb should be "find".
"... for men’s easy access to information ...", don't you mean "humans' "?
"...had been widely influenced and still continuing to use..." your verb makes no sense. You have a huge shift from had been influenced to continuing.
" Even in the roads and highways, advancements were being applied." Were being, or are being applied? Write all the proper verbs in present tense, not just here but in the entire paper. You need verb consistency.
"Treatments for the diseases which seemed to be no cure at all were discovered...", "for the diseases which seemed to be no cure at all" is an ambiguous reference. Are the diseases or the treatments no cure at all?
"What’s the truth is that..." this is awkward.
"Influences of modernization are also keeping on touching the field of industry." Awkward, needs revising.
"It uses different modern ideas for new discoveries...", its uses different is awkward and needs to be fixed.
" wise people who used it in the right way it should be", change used to use, and delete "it should be".
Hope this helps!
It really helped me a lot. Thanks for the review.
I will be careful on these important points to remember next time.
what i have to say i agree what the darkknight guy said... you need work more on how you introduce and conclude and your idea should be wild, and also it should purely you,even if you wanna get ref. its should be for definitions and quotations, your ref were so much it seems as though you copied and pasted the whole work.
Hi RachelLescano,DK with review.Just a few things I want to point up here.
Introduction in your an essay quite spins on thing which already known. It's not so bad, but I think it's such a waste of time. At the beginning of an essay, you should write clearly and centered on what you want to convey later.Keep it simple,straight to the point but still convincing!
The rest is good,no problem.But I think you should add this to the end paragraph of your essay;
*As a conclusion...bla..bla .It's like the sign of the end in your essay
Good job,and good luck.Keep it up.
kudos,cheers
sorry i was lost after the first word lol
Hi Dreamy here to review,
That was a very good question you have asked in the end of your essay. And the title was catchy. It's difficult to make people believe that something is good and worth, while it is very easy to blame on stuffs. In which case you have done a great job, though there are few mistakes. In the last line of your first paragraph you have said, "When we focus on the positive side........" This line is like your are definitely saying that there is a negative side for the technologies, of course every man-made things has pro's and con's but when it come to a debate or an essay you should never say any negative comments about the object you are trying to justify. Well, you can say certain things that would only make them laugh it out not something that will make them to note it and think.
And try not to underline things if at all it is going to be an handwritten. And giving out the references at the end is another good way to end an essay. Well done.
Happy writing!!!
Cheers!!!
Thank you!
I agree that technology has already been a big part on our lives already. And we all know that technology is everywhere, because technology is always present in different fields. I salute you for your nice work.
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Sphealwithit here, good marrow
Good essay you got here. I don't usually review things like this so my opinion may not be valuable. I see a few mistakes however, you seem to switch sides almost. You need to stick to one opinion and argue the other sides. The use of 'make life easier then easier' again makes little sense. You need to take out the second easier as the reader already knows that technology makes life easier.
Other than that it's a pretty good essay
Keep up the good work
Sphealwithit out..
This was pretty good
I liked it 
I am not very good at reviews on things like these, and my mind is a bit off on inspiration for my own stories so ill leave it with - 
I liked it
Good job
I hope to read more of your works
Sl4y4
Alright, the biggest issue that I see here is that you bounce back between opinions. You need to pick one side of the story (technology good vs. technology bad) and stick to it.
Or you could do a compare/contrast essay, but then you need things to compare/contrast.
This doesn't feel right to me. Using "Most likely" would be a little better in my opinion.
Missed spacing.
Missed spacing and repetition. If you could find a synonym to the word, "easier" and use it in place of that second usage, that would be better.
*Edit
I thought that you did very good, and when you were making a point you argued it very clearly and precisely. I wouldn't ask so many questions, however. This is an informative essay, not a questionnaire. You are supposed to be answering the questions, not asking them. It takes some quality away from the essay.
A little revision over everything wouldn't hurt, I thought that you did pretty good, but like with anything else, it needs some work before it's perfect.
See ya's.
Knight Teen
hello! Knight Cailey with the requested review.
Okay- I will mention things that I find as I go along, and hopefully I can cover all the major points and give you a helpful review.
Beginning with the introduction. I believe these are all meant to be persuasive essays. That means that you need to take a side and stick to it. Do not mention the negative side of technology unless you are going to argue that technology is bad. If you mention that it can be good and can be bad- you just make a sloppy essay that sits on the fence and isn't persuasive enough. Most people are somewhere in the middle of every argument, and they don't necessarily believe either extreme. But- for an essay like this it is important that you take one side and one side only.
Say yes technology is good, and then stick to that point. None of this wavering back and forth admitting that there's a point to the other side. Just argue one point.
Your body is really good though. You did a nice job at starting every paragraph by saying that you think technology is good because it affects *insert whatever*. So the beginning sentences helped tie the piece together and bring a conclusion to the piece that was really nice.
And on to the conclusion: Again the same thing I said in the beginning. Don't stand in the middle. Stick to your point that technology can help us. Don't tell us that it has to be used wisely or it can be bad. For this kind of essay, we only want to know what the good parts are. (I mean, there are other kinds of essays and other points of view you can take. This doesn't always apply. But from what I've seen of all these essays- I think that you should just focus on one side and argue just one point.)
Also, it would be nice if in your conclusion you returned a little more to your three points of evidence. Give a clear recap of what you talked about in the essay.
I hope this helps. Good luck submitting this.
-Knight Cailey
It's not surprising that you have made a great essay.
Very interesting. And you have a wide variety of words. 
Keep it up. 
I love it. You've made an excellent essay. Job well done.
Technology is really a big word. The essay you've done was great but some little corrections. But in all it is nice and interesting.
You have a point on your essay. Keep up the good work!
Hi! I'm here to do a simple review on your work.
YOu have clearly explained your point. Keep up the good work!
"According to Merisia (2010), home appliance really made to make life easier for everyone making it easier for us to spend as much time as possible with family and friends. - You forgot to remove the hyperlink of "home appliance". You might want to consider putting was/is in between home appliance and really. You might also want to consider using commas to make your sentences more understandable.
"One more thing is that, as said by Leybovich (2010), new advances in communications technology, data analysis and smart infrastructure are enabling more businesses to streamline their transportation strategies through better trip-planning and improved resource allocation." - You also forgot to remove the hyperlink of "smart infrastructure".
Over-all, your essay was great.
You made a good point. You were able to deliver your message well. It was very comprehensible
I just noticed that the first sentence of your last paragraph may use "...from the simplest to the greatest extents of our lives" instead of "in the simplest to the greatest extent..." But as a whole, your essay was good. Keep up the good work 
I like your first sentence, that simple sentence gives lot of meaning, I do agree with some of your points, overall I like your article..
Keep it up ..
Ooh, nice. Thanks a lot, you're a genius. Keep up the good work.
Nice essay.
“Technology”- it’s a simple word with a big meaning.
You've given us an overview about technology. Explanations are very well said and informs the reader. Keep it up!
"According to Merisia (2010), home appliance really made to make life easier for everyone making it easier for us to spend as much time as possible with family and friends." - You may want to consider adding commas in this sentence to make it more understandable.
"One more thing is that, as said by Leybovich (2010), new advances in communications technology, data analysis and smart infrastructure are enabling more businesses to streamline their transportation strategies through better trip-planning and improved resource allocation." - You can rephrase this sentence.
"find out" (fourth paragraph, fifth sentence) - this is a two-word verb
Overall great job. You exhibited good use of transitional devices. The questions in the first paragraph were addressed. You have researched well. You've got good sources. Keep it up!
Nice one. I like your essay. Keep up the good work.