katiehorsie

Hi there personnn. I like this as a whole, and there is little I could find to complain about as well. And it is annoying when people do that. It ...

I like this. I didn't really see any punctuation issues or grammatical issues either. There was one place, in: "But one-by-one The street emptied The laughter trickled away" Where I ...

Hidere, So, I was confused on the POV here - in a good way. At first I was like "Oh, this is about parents talking about their kids" but then ...

Hiya, So I am going to review little grammatical things and such as I go and then give you a big overview of what I saw at the end of ...

Hiya, So funness here. I just read the first one. Anywaaayssssss..... time for my lovely commentary and grammar/punctuation fun: so for hell frost, its all pretty good except technically the ...

Hiya, Before I start, I just have to ask: Is that Blue from Foster's Home for Imaginary Friends (i think thats what its called) in your profile picture? Because if ...

Hiya, So this is a good little piece, and it does show the feelings decently, but for this length, it could be much more. The "speech impediment" confused me because ...

Hiya, So, this does have some potential, but as it is right now, I was actually cracking up as I read this. I REALLY don't mean to be mean, but ...

Hiya, So I like this a lot, and I think everyone in the world can somehow relate to this. Anyways, you did a good job with description of everything, and ...

Hey, This is a good story. Is it by any chance somehow inspired or based off of "Just a Dream" by Carrie Underwood? I see parallels between the two. Anyways, ...

Great little story. It really conveys the emotions and feelings well. The only thing that I think you need to do with it is just a quick little punctuation issue. ...

Heyyyy, nice poem. I like the idea and all, but it reads... strangely. I feel like if you were to break up the lines so the rhymes would be at ...

Nice poem. It could use a bit of playing with like substituting in different words and messing with the order of your phrases and so forth. I like how you ...

Love your poem! How it flows really isn't bad, though if you play a bit with how you break up your lines, it could make the poem flow better without ...