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  • Poetry » Realistic, Romantic Re: Insecurties

    Hey Junel! Really love the title and description you gave. "You chose me And built me up - Now you tear me down" Very relatable words here, I would just ...

    Nov 9, 2017
  • Short Story » Narrative, Narrative Re: The worst day of my life.

    Hey brebre, it's pretty hard to critique a piece based on a personal experience. So I'll try to tip-toe around the harsh critique and give you my impressions. "The worst ...

    Apr 16, 2013
  • Poetry » Realistic, Culture Re: Hurt by my people

    I feel so lucky being the first to critique this. I was wondering why no one else had yet till I looked at the date (teehee). I'll get the nitpicks ...

    Apr 11, 2013
  • Poetry » Dramatic, General Re: The Writhing Inside of Me

    I reeeeeeally wanna write a good review on this one. But damn it's too good (not that I wanted it to be bad or anything). I don't think I'll be ...

    Jan 25, 2013
  • Poetry » Dramatic, General Re: I might not live tomorrow

    When I first read your title, I was sorta praying you weren't serious (knee-jerk reaction sorry). Then I read it and... I'm thinking that this is gonna be hard to ...

    Jan 25, 2013
  • Poetry » General, General Re: Wonderland

    Woah. O.o Your poem had me thinking about a beautiful scenic park, especially with that title, until I realized it was a graveyard... I like it! :D "Shady leaves mask ...

    Jan 25, 2013
  • Other » General, General Re: Sorry, sorry, sorry.

    Some spelling spikes, and I really think you should've broken up this long paragraph... but other than that, I sincerely hope your not gonna make a disappearance any time soon. ...

    Jan 21, 2013
  • Poetry » Dramatic, Narrative Re: The Stages of Friendship

    I really liked the title you put to this piece. It's simple and pretty much to the point. :) I have to be honest and say that the start hit ...

    Jan 21, 2013
  • Poetry » Culture, Lyrical Re: Gain to Give, Give to Gain

    I'm looking at the review you have so far... and am now comparing it to the time this was posted... still somehow I think this poem needs more freaking attention. ...

    Jan 14, 2013
  • Novel / Chapter » Horror, Fantasy Re: An Unusual Trip

    It was a bit slow to peak my interest at first, I must admit. But I hung in there, for the payoff. "I wish I had back for her, had ...

    Jan 14, 2013
  • Poetry » General, Other Re: Wishbones

    Woah.... Kay this was craaaaazy good.... I don't have much to say tbh, but wow.... Sorry. I'm a bit too dazed to write anything expect -wow- at the moment. You ...

    Jan 14, 2013
  • Poetry » Horror, General Re: Control

    Last stanza got me. I found myself squirming a bit round the rest. Not because it was awful, but because your description was so raw that I felt uncomfortable reading ...

    Jan 10, 2013
  • Poetry » General, Romantic Re: "I love you"

    Simple and flawless. Had my eyes doing the creepy side-to-side thing, but it was very pretty. More than that actually, it was gorgeous. 0///0 "The games you’d always play" Love ...

    Jan 10, 2013
  • Poetry » General, General Re: Of Lace and Silk

    Holy SMOKES! :O tbh, I was pretty confused at first. Sort of thinking like 'Wats she on about?'- But count my stars that was terrific!! Such a treat to read. ...

    Jan 10, 2013


It had a perfectly round door like a porthole, painted green, with a shiny yellow brass knob in the exact middle. The door opened on to a tube-shaped hall like a tunnel: a very comfortable tunnel without smoke, with panelled walls, and floors tiled and carpeted, provided with polished chairs, and lots and lots of pegs for hats and coats—the hobbit was fond of visitors. The tunnel wound on and on, going fairly but not quite straight into the side of the hill —The Hill, as all the people for many miles round called it—and many little round doors opened out of it, first on one side and then on another.
— JRR Tolkien