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It is a really sad little poem, oh my goodness.. It was a really interesting though.. I can't critique this much because you did wonderfully on punctuation, good writing, etc. ...

Spark, I.. Gods of Egypt. That's hard to describe as anything but interesting and quite beautiful. In the second paragraph, I would take away a 'she' or two, and add, ...

Wow. And wow. I noticed this was very simply written, but to be frank, that's excellent because you didn't draw all these things that you didn't need to. It was ...

Hmm..this is interesting. I wasn't able to catch the point until you mention, "its the end of my childhood". Which is probably my own mistake. You have good grammar, spelling, ...

Oh my goodness gracious. This was one of the most interesting short story kind of thing I believe I've ever read. You succeeded in catching a writer's, an artist's curiosity. ...

This is a wonderful little short story. I loved the point(s): the character loved the forest, nature, trees. She wanted to smile, no matter that she was dying. Her love ...

Hmm. I say this was a very interesting poem indeed. Like "therealme" said, I think it is a lovely skeleton of a poem. Its simple, which makes it beautiful among ...

Oh my goodness! That was very very interesting.. You caught the pain, the one that seems like its indescribable. Your title is very good, and each word you pick is ...

*gulps* That wasn't slightly frightening at all, even then, I enjoyed reading it very much. Its haunting, but beautifully interesting. I can easily tell the timeline of when this is, ...

This is a..poem that no words can even define. I have to ask if this is a true story about yourself, even though I know that teens (and adults) go ...

My goodness gracious, this is a beautiful poem! You have such incredible wording, not too much, just enough. Dearie, you should be entering this into some more things. I wish ...

I really, quite honestly, loved this poem. Even though its short, you didn't over-do it by going overboard with lines that aren't needed. There's a hard line to hit between ...