Hii!
Okay, first of all, its awesome even if it was posted in the spur of the moment 
It doesn't matter what you post, as long as it can get the message and meaning through to the readers.
Actually, to be honest, I didn't know what you were talking about until I saw the childhood part. Then,I went back and read the whole thing again. It all made so much more sense
You've done a really good job of writing this, although I will have to disagree with you on some parts
Childhood is a wonderful phase, full of laughter and freedom, I so agree with you on that, but adulthood isn't that bad either. Sure, the world is not all good like it used to be, but that doesn't necessarily have to mean that it is a bad thing. "Growing up is a part of life" Yeah you've probably heard plenty of those, and its true. We can't hold onto childhood much longer. At some point or another, we will start realizing that life isn't all about freedom.
For we all are born innocent into a world full of corruption.
I so agree with you on this one as well, but although most parts of the world are going through this horrible phase, it is not a sole reason to call growing up, a dark place.
Every cloud has a silver lining
Okay, I am so sorry. I just got lost in thought for a moment there
Anyways, on to the grammatical errors:
The grammar and punctuation was pretty good except one or two. You might want to work on the commas a bit more. Because, at certain points, there seem to be a lack of commas where I felt it was necessary.
Thats all, considering this a short one
Yup, good job really! I understand where the thought's coming from. Believe me, I'd thought about it many a times too
Keep it up!
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