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Hey, Feelingz! Welcome to YWS, hope you like it here! Let's dive into this. In the first paragraph, you have a few nitpicks from me. "J.'s cafe" looks a little ...

Hey, aud290! It's wisegirl22 here for a review! Well, first of all, this sentence kind of overdoes it with the "and"s. So, instead of writing and, maybe you could put ...

Hey, Dracula! As the person below me said, you have some spelling errors, and keep in mind that in the books, Draco is usually called Malfoy. That's all you need ...

Hey! I'm wisegirl22, here once again to help clear out the Green Room! This teacher is obviously not what you would think. All teachers don't say that their students are ...

Hey, Audy! After a month of not being on here, it feels good to take a stretch and review...especially with the sad monkey. So, first off, I couldn't really understand ...

Heya, Sarah12! Welcome to Young Writers Society! I see this is your second work--congratulations! :D So, I'll give you the normal capitalization talk. Poems are sentences put into different lines ...

Hey, I'm wisegirl, here to review! So, first of all, I notice this whole paragraph is moved over a bit, as if it were tabbed. It is different from the ...

Hey, fallenoutofgrace! Wisegirl22 here to review your chapter one! I was like, ohmigods me got to review that. :D So, in the beginning sentence, you should put "old" after "year." ...

Hey, CuriosityCat! Wisegirl22 here to review your...bloody work. O.O So, in the first stanza, you kind of confuse me with your words there. "A toy's getting the chop" and "strife ...

Heya, LogicAndObjections. Wisegirl22 here to review! So, first off, there's this one nitpick. The word order isn't exactly the best here, and it would sound better if you switched the ...

Hey, unknown! You wanted me to review, so here I am! So, I enjoyed reading this rhyming poem. At first, the rhyme scheme was a bit off, but eventually it ...

Heya, fallenoutofgrace! Wisegirl22 here to review your work! Haha, what captured me was the title. When I was browsing the home page, I saw this on featured works, read the ...

Okay, hey! I am wisegirl22, here to review your fanfiction! I have read a bit of Harry Potter, so I at least know what you are talking about. :D So, ...

Hey, GlitterKitty! wisegirl22 here to review! Okay, so I got the same impression of the title that Pompadour did. I did not expect this. This whole poem surprised me, actually. ...

Hey! Wisegirl22 here to review your fanfiction! I see it's based off of Warriors. That's good, amazing series. So, in this wonderfully cute dialogue, wanna has an appropriate apostrophe at ...