The Beauty and me

Hello there!

Okay, so I was a bit surprised by the actual poem when I first clicked on it, like some of the others it seems haha. I found this poem to be pretty amusing, considering all the sad poems I've been reading lately. It made me laugh, which, I hope were your intentions when you wrote this.

I do believe it might also have a deeper meaning though. I think this could represent some of the teens of this age, the younger ones, and also, some of the girls in high school, but thats just me.

Anyway, good job. Funny poem.

Hey, GlitterKitty! wisegirl22 here to review!

Okay, so I got the same impression of the title that Pompadour did. I did not expect this. This whole poem surprised me, actually. It's a bunch of cut-offs and hyper...did you eat too much candy before writing this? Hehe. I'd suggest editing this a bit, maybe making it have more sense. I felt like I was bouncing around while reading this piece. The last line makes reference to your Young Writers Society name, which I love. It was a nice touch, but the poem overall is a bit messy. I enjoyed it though!

-wisegirl22

xD Hi Glitter!

This is interesting. And different. But it kind of made me smile~ xD Hm. I would tell you, however, to work on how to break lines. If you look at it, the seventh line is way longer than the others, and that can be a little bit distracting. To be honest, I felt like not reading the last three lines... I mean, I know it is psychological but that's what writers should work with. ;D Another thing, I would mention is for you to work on the title to get a more catchy and more accurate first impression of your piece. When I read "The Beauty and me", I thought this was going to be one cheesy love poem or something. And... yeah, that's pretty much it.

Hello there GlitterKitty! Unknown391625 here with another review!

So, this poem is very nice, neat and simple. Though, the title sounded more elegant, honestly. You ended it off with a bunch of street slang, like a rap song. But in the beginning, it started out very nice. There is a couple of errors as of punctuation and capitalization. In the second line, you capitalized the first word, when it was continuing a sentence. You also didn't punctuate that line when you started the next line. You also capitalized the first word of the fourth line and I maybe would have put a comma after that word since you continued the sentence with the fifth line. There are other errors with punctuation and capitalization. I am sure you get the gist of it now. Otherwise, this is funny! Good job! Don't give up and always write!

-Unknown391625

Hello!

After reading the poem, I was just "wtf?"
And it took me a moment to realize that you probably meant it as a joke

Good job

Wow you really showed a lot of confidence here. Although probably a joke, it made me laugh. So thank you Glitter Kitty, I'm sure you enjoyed writing this too! I don't know if I would call this poetry or quite a masterpiece but waking up flawless sounds awesome. Keep writing and I love the title 'beauty and me,' haha. Happy holidays and JasmineC out!

Haha, I can really FEEL the joy here. The confidence. I don't even know what to say here, because I'm pretty sure this is a joke.
of, course, you did copy a song for half the poem. But since the poem's short, i will forgive.
It makes no sense. But I enjoyed.
[/i]bleats[/i] Sheepie out.