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Hey, NYC I don't Know too much about songs/lyrics, but I know when I read your piece like poetry it was lovely. I liked it. I like the name too:firestarter. ...

Hey, singerofthenight, I liked this! Love the imagery. Loved how you portrayed the violence of the storm, which symbolized the pain,with words. My favourite part-- "Gray clouds as far As ...

Hey, JessyAnnie, I'm des. I like your poem. It's deliberate and so is the pace. I think if punctuation was used then you'd get the right pauses in the right ...

Hey, Icarlyfan, just quickly reviewing your excerpt. Great choice for the name, I like it. But should it be Assasins' Creed? Anyway, now there were alot of redundancy with your ...

Hey, Breezy, I'm Des. I loved this! I got this energetic feeling when I read it. My heart rate went up too! The flow was great. And I think you ...

Hey Bailecielo, Im Des. Hey I think this was superb. And I like the ending: Mirrror as a mirror mirrors . Kinda biting my tongue when I say it. :D ...

Hey there Madel,I'm des. :D Your poem was alright. But I do have to agree with yrclever, it is cliche. At first I thought you were posting Hillary Duff's song ...

Hey,Writing, I'm des. This has potential, but you need to work on it a bit. You should--as foxfire stated--use more description and really show the readers what's going on. You ...

Hey, Nalyd. I like that name: Nalyd :) . It rolls of the tongue nicely. By chance, is it ''Dylan'' spelled backwards? Anyway enough of that. I liked your poem. ...

Hey,Monument, I'm des. This piece was good! The idea or concept of your poem is understandable. But to me--in some cases-- it was a bit loose. In the first line ...

Hey, karibbeandiva, I like the concept of your poem but it needs a bit of work. So i'm going to critique it for you. I'll do my best.( But don't ...

Hello,PoeticGlow, I'm Des. Your poem was good. It gives readers a clear understanding of the enticing, temptation and indulges of cocaine. Does the part with "...the sweat runs down your ...

Hey, cluless, your poem sure does contradict your name. Your piece was good, but I can't say that it was excellent. I may be wrong, but I think it would ...

Hey, Shayna, I loved your story. Your protagonist and the possible antagonist are really mysterious. Though well written, there's a few mistakes, but you don't need me to point them ...

Hello, dreamer, welcome. Whoa. I got goose bumps reading your peice for some reason. I like. It speaks true. What's funny is that there's no one who has never been ...