This is my first post. The chapter isn't done yet but I'm kind of stuck. Can you help? Critique is needed.
Question and Answer
PREFACE
This family is obviously the answer. They’re also the problem. How and why does this always happen to me?! Just as I’m starting to get used to an idea!
On my way to school I’m thinking about that new family that just moved in next door. Their daughter is fairly pretty. She’s seems nice although I could tell that something was bothering her. I wonder what it is. I’m guessing that she is the youngest, the way that she got her parents attention so easily. My little sister can do that too, annoying little brat. The brothers seemed a little more relaxed. Although I noticed that they didn’t talk much. Actually they didn’t talk at all. The parents are very much resembled in their children. The daughter’s hair and eyes are the same colour as the father. The sons’ height and skin tone is very much their mother.
My observations were cut short as Jake tapped my shoulder. I flinched instinctively.
“Oh carp!” I yelled.
“Sorry ‘bout that but we got to go, we’re at school.” He responded offended that he frightened me.
“Oh, thanks. It’s just that you startled me.” I answered still recovering from the startle.
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