dasiamari

"The persistent dripping of water is the first thing that came into my awareness as my eyes flutter open. I can't process why I had awaken. But why is there ...

I loved this! I don't understand all of the negative reviews :/ This made me laugh! A good haiku has five syllables, then seven, and then five again. Its a ...

I really liked your poem! It made me laugh! I love the rhyme. Even though it is not popular in modern poetry, I rather like it! What they didn't know, ...

This poem is short, because who gives a damn about beauty anymore? I actually really liked your poem, because in just 12 words you actually made me think. My first ...

Hi! I really liked your poem! So here's my review! In the new year we shall have pie, (Pie seemed kind of randomly placed for the sake of the rhyme) ...

Okay a review as promised! (sorry it took so long my computer crashed!) Okay so I loved this poem! But in parts I was slightly confused. "Crisp wind blows. Notes ...

I really liked this. One thing stood out was; "I collate the art So I ask what is art And untie the writing This spider limbed writing" (This stanza too ...

Okay! Honestly I thought this was more of a poem then lyrics. "Warm winter nights In J a n u a r y" (Okay so J a n u a ...

Well there isn't much to review....but that's a very nice period. They usually come at the end of sentences though, so you might want to add some words to put ...

Wonderful! I think that punctuation would help it though. "I'd cross the plains Ride dying stars Persue the paths To anywhere far" (Okay I think you should put a period ...

I loved this. Okay: "with the masks on their hands and later cover their faces." Maybe it should be in their hands? My favorite line was: "The dance at night, ...

I love it. You created such perfect imagery in such a small amount of words. "the scream of the owls, the kiss of the cold wind." This was my favorite ...

Well welcome to yws! This story is amazing. I love it. I would love to know more about why she does this? Why she lays on a train track jumping ...

Were the earth is dry, the grass is died, and the melting sky is grey,(( maybe you can say where the gras HAS died, or where the grass is dead. ...

Today I am alone; I feel alone. ((Nice start)) Like I am in the middle of a snowy road, in a plain white, middle of nowhere ((I don't really understand ...