convintojm

A little bit confusing but i still feel like i can understand the feeling behind it even if i don't understand the intent of every line.

It really gives the reader a strong sense of mood feeling and i love the specfic details and images.

very cheesy and cutesy though it might make a nice card for her sometime. if you wanted to improve it i would add some specfics and not worry about rhyme ...

i liked the first stanza but the last stanza seemed tired with so many mentions to unlocking sort of things. it was like yeah i get it are you done ...

the topic could be interesting but it's addressed too directly and without enough thought.

i kept expecting the worser things to be identified. and i like the use of the word worser cause i here it more often from people younger or less mature ...

nice. i like the bit of a twist ending.

kinda redundant and a rather depressing ending that i didn't really like and didn't really seem to fit with the poem.

too much repetition in a short time and does little to capture the reader.

the beginning isn't as strong or interesting as possible but i too really like the ending. murdered by cliches was one of my favorite lines.

it sounds simply like a short description of a headache or the like but it doesn't seem to hold anything deeper and so leaves the reader going, yeah and what's ...

my thought behind that captalization is because it's a name of the flower. so i figured it would be more obvious it's a specific thing as opposed to some kinda ...

the ending is really good (with the ball) but the rest seemed just ok. i'd like to see it with some of niteowl's suggestions.

starts off pretty good. but it just gets too blah and predictible. makes you sound immature.

like them all. the first one is definitly my favorite though. a lot of nice images in the last one but the first two lines are too right to the ...