JUST FOR U
You are my best friend
I know you will be there till the end
I tell you stuff all the time
Every now and then I may seem like a mime
We've known each other since we were eight
Its been so long I don't even remember the date
You are there through thick and thin
Even when I feel like giving in
Listening to me whine and complain
i must sound so very lame
We laugh until we cry
Sometimes we don't even know why
You are so clever
And i will love you forever
I know you will be there till the end
You are my best friend
By Nicola Bruce
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Hello Nicola!
I really liked your poem. It spoke very simply and it seemed heart felt. Don't listen to what people say about it being "cheesey" or "the rhyme is all wrong". In my opinion, you can't "really" judge someone else's poetry because it's all from the heart and holds special meaning to the person who wrote it.
Great Job!!
-thevoiceinside
Your poem is very sweet and endearing, although it lacks punctuation throughout. Apart from the punctuation, the poem seems really natural and that i think, is a good thing since its very easy to read and understand.Good job Nicola
Sorry, but this poem seems very very forced!!
It wasn't that bad, but you reall really have to work on you rythm.
Some lines were good, though, like this one.
Its not the best line ever but I liked it because I can relate to it. lol!
Although, One can tell that this poem is written with real emotion and feeling for your friend.
So, maybe if you work on it, It can be MUCH better.
Definitely needs a rewrite.
All the best!!
very cheesy and cutesy though it might make a nice card for her sometime. if you wanted to improve it i would add some specfics and not worry about rhyme that much unless it's coming very naturally.
Ohmigod that was really good your friend must be so proud that you wrote a poem for her Well done and keep up the good work